Are you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school
From many erudite thinker's points of view, although human is on the edge of civilization and stands on a pinnacle of wisdom, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of the crucial role of studying hard in school to success in the future job. Furthermore, in numerous circle of study and connoisseurs of the field, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that for success in future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school, on the other extreme of the rope, some believe that studying hard have more impact on finding jobs in future. While both sides take their own position, from my vantage point, the latter group carries more weight and my reasons are discussed below.
The first exquisite reason of the current discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that by studying hard in school I can improve my basic knowledge about different topics that may be vital for my future job. For example, when I was in high school I studied mathematics hard and I tried to improve my math knowledge. I became familiar with Mathematics Planning. After high school, I went to university and my knowledge about the Mathematics Planning helped me to find a new job in math laboratory. Actually, my hardworking in studying math in high school created for me the new job opportunity.
The second reason coming to my mind cogently to substantiate and vindicate my standpoint concerning this issue is that by studying hard in high school I can learn the ability to relate well to people. For instance, when I was 17 years old, I tried hard to understand the book which was about customer relationship management and tried to present that to my classmate. After several years a company invited me to a job interview and I used that experience and that books passage and I could pass that interview.
To put everything in a nutshell, a broad lookover the main points and discussions reveals that the fact that studying hard in high school have a crucial role in finding jobs and we should study hard to improve our knowledge about different topics in order to find a new opportunity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...g hard have more impact on finding jobs in future. While both sides take their own positi...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ics in order to find a new opportunity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75268817204 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71640017717 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481182795699 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4415263991 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.333333333 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332739429165 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125256642491 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106418776622 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201568344454 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0971333936936 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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