At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Although classes and libraries are important for our schools and societies and play an incredible role in people's future, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of the sports and social activities in blooming and thriving the nations. While some believe that government should pay attention more to classes and libraries, on the other extreme of the rope, some believe that sports and social activities are important and we should not forget their crucial role. Although both sides take their positions, from my view, the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons.
First, I think that sports and social activities can improve student's brain activities and help them think better. Actually, students can improve their self-confidence. For example, when I was a high school student I could not read English passages very well and I always confused about English pronunciation and Spanish pronunciation. I decide to join the sports gym at my high school in order to find new friends. That gym helped me communicate to other people and improve my English speaking. I am greatly thankful to the government to create that an amazing sports complex.
The second reason coming to my mind with this issue is that improving and paying attention to sports and social activities can discover and identify new young talents to society. These valuable talents are important elements for their country. For instance, five years ago Korea government allocated much money to construct sports complexes all over the country. They decided to achieve their dreams which were about Olympic games. In that sports complexes, they discovered new clever young talents who could wone colorful medals in Olympic games.
To put everything in a nutshell and broad lookover the main points and discussions reveals the fact that sports and social activities are important as classes and libraries and government should allocate much money to them in order to improve the student's brain activities and discover new young talents that can achieve dramatically goals such as colorful medals in Olympic games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ish pronunciation. I decide to join the sports gym at my high school in order to find ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, look, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22093023256 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65676682291 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520348837209 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.8865530802 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.25 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220346386449 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657708265301 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718669036571 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146968391437 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558766156157 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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