Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that advertisements that target young children should be banned. Others hold the opinion that prohibiting these commercials could have detrimental effect on our families and the economy. In my view, I concur with the position that advertisements that are meant for little kids should not be censored for many potential reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Although some folks might argue that companies could advertise harmful or unhealthy items for our children, I think that this argument lacks coherence to some extent. Since most countries have oversight agencies that are responsible for making sure the items in the local markets are safe for their end customers, it's unreasonable to have any doubts about safety issues. Furthermore, some parents in limited-income families might be afraid that children demands could put economic and financial pressure on the already scarce resources of the disenfranchised family. This scenario applies when a kid watches the commercial and asks caregivers to purchase him or her the product. Again, this minor issue could be resolved by distracting the child's attention away from the topic and it's well-established that young children would easily forget if their parents engaged them in another activity that they like.
Moreover, the majority of individuals would agree with the notion that introducing products via commercials that are aimed for youngsters offer various advantages. For instance, children could get to accept a new healthy food or recipe through advertisements. To illustrate more thoroughly, I remember how when we bought my nephew a new baby food, which was recommended by the doctor. At first, my nephew refused to eat it. However, when he saw the commercial on TV, he really liked it and as a result, he started to eat the new food. In addition, advertisements in general are good for the economy since they increase consumption and consumer spending, which, in turn, support job growth. Needless to say that sometimes funny and entertaining commercials are one way to change a child's mood. To clarify some parents implement the strategy of showing their kid one of their favorite commercials whenever the young child is upset or crying.
To conclude, I am of the opinion that Television advertising for children should be allowed for the reasons mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, well, for instance, i think, in addition, in general, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30687830688 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9161984171 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60582010582 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1333967949 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134388982353 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458098860907 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058261964863 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11086508456 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565639168109 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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