Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The debate on whether child-oriented advertising should be allowed or not has garnered a range of views. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to check the constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Some people posit that television advertising that aimed children has negative impacts on a child. On the other hand, some others take the opposite side and disagree. From my vantage point, I agree with the former group and aver that these kinds of advertisements may cause serious problems inside the family. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be considered is that children's cognitive abilities. In a narrow condition, children are not capable to understand and distinguish the best choice; therefore, when a child watches this type of advertisement, he/she cannot recognize the pros and cons of each product. Consequently, the child will choose the product or service which has the best advertising show. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child - approximately 5 years old -, I used to go shopping with my mother, and every single time I chose one kind of chocolate which had the best advertisement on television, although its taste was disgusting.
Secondly, another reason which deserves some words to say is that the child-oriented advertising can affect the family decision. Parents usually are affected by their children's choices, so when their children choose a specific product based on an advertisement on television, a parent would immediately buy it regardless of this product is good enough or not. A vivid example that can shed light on this issue is one from my brother's experience. My brother has a young son - three years old. However, my brother always buys one kind of honey because his son loves the bear that shows in the advertisement.
To wrap it up, contemplating all aforesaid reasons, one can soon realize that television advertising directed toward a child has many negative facets.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15588235294 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02604525913 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1996690226 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.117647059 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177890077336 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543433668694 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314482761909 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107240216594 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302678316381 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.