In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon?
Technological improvements
Changes to education systems
Improvements to our diets
Use specific details and examples in your answer. You may choose more than one cause.
Life is very precious. It depends on us how we spend our life. In my view, I firmly believe that people are living longer lives due to advanced technology for two reasons.
To begin with, we can get immediate medical support if something goes wrong. Life is full of uncertainty, we don’t know when the emergency arrives. For example, last year, my grandmother had a severe heart attack we took her took the hospital which very near to my home. We did call them on our way to the hospital so they were aware. As soon as we reach she got treatment and they have advanced machinery so doctors were able to save my grandmother. They said that it was a very severe attack and if she didn’t get treatment right away then she might be lost life. She was kept a couple of days in the hospital and once she started to feel better they discharged her. Now she is leaving regular life. We were able to save her because of advanced technology in the medical field. This was not possible in the past when there is no availability of advanced machinery. This example taught me that humans can live longer because of easy access to the hospital.
Moreover, people are more aware of their health. Now many health checkups and tests are available to know the fitness of the person. For instance, my brother opened the heath center five years ago. In that center he had many advanced instruments for exercises like treadmill, cycling, lifting also had one center to perform a test like a body checkup, body mass index. He was saying that many people are coming daily to do exercise. And regularly they do physical tests also. As a result, humans are living longer. People are not aware in the past because the technology was not advanced.
In sum, various viewpoints and perspectives exit on this issue, I am convinced that people have a longer life is due to technology development. Not only, they have immediate medical support but also they are more aware of their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e. And regularly they do physical tests also. As a result, humans are living longer....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62393162393 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46823637647 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524216524217 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7121740447 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.625 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.625 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137193793699 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442142148596 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042708881581 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988790717456 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291247020477 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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