TPO 30 Writing Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
It's hard to gainsaid that a four days' vocation is quite attractive to most of us, and such a fact lead some people generate the idea that working for three days for extremely long time is more enjoyable than normal schedule namely working for five days for shorter time. However, as far as the working effectiveness, correct rate and the personal health condition are concerned I just can’t share the same cup of tea with these people. I will scrutinize those factors in my following paragraphs.
First and the foremost, the fact that people are easily to get tired after long and incessant working indicates that their working effectiveness will suffer detriment from their choose. To be more specific, in such a stressful condition, it is hard for workers to continue to focus on their jobs, and there for they are more like to be distracted by other issues, such as messages from their friends, advertisement bounces on the computer screen or noise outside. As a result, people may have to finish their tasks on their four day’s vocation with an exhausted body, I guess nobody would describe this kind of working schedule by using the word ‘enjoyable’.
Nevertheless, a voice would arise that working incessantly has a great contribution for people to grasp their inspiration which may suddenly appear at the end of the working day. Ironically, this kind of statement suffers both from logical factual fallacies. working for three days means you must work at least 13 hours per day, in this case, there will be no one who have any energy left to finish their groundbreaking work with inspiration. On the other hand, if we choose the normal schedule, we can write down the inspiration when it come up in our mind but we don’t have time to do further work, after that we can pick up our work next day without any trouble after relaxing for a whole night.
us">In a nutshell, I maintain the idea that people should choose the latter working style for a more enjoyable life. And I also believe that my opponent will compromise after being exposed to my article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Working
...rs both from logical factual fallacies. working for three days means you must work at l...
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Line 9, column 539, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
... can write down the inspiration when it come up in our mind but we don't have t...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Us&apos
...ter relaxing for a whole night. us'>In a nutshell, I maintain the idea tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, at least, i guess, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89106145251 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77455725698 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575418994413 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5774638649 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.916666667 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300845540131 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104769348962 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089418478364 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181193988616 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777752062352 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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