Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults Which view do you agree with Use examples to support your position

Most people will be adults and their growth depends on two great influencer: parents and friends. As we grow up we will have friends aside from having parents and family. I think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. I have two reasons to explore in this essay.

First of all, we usually stay with our friends. When we are students we always go to school and academy. Hence, we usually hang out with friends all day. When we become high school, it is an important time for our lives so friends have a big impact in our lives. Understandably, they spend much time with friends so their friends are the most important influence in young adults.

Secondly, you and friends' hobbies are the same. When they make friends, they hang out with friends who have the same hobbies. For example, In my school only a few students play with them like a group. Because their hobbies are the same. And they tell serious stories only to friends they don’t want to talk to their parents.

In conclusion, I think friends are the best influence because we usually stay with our friends. In addition,we and our friends’ hobbies are the same.

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Average: 7.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 1977.66487455 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 204.0 407.700716846 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71568627451 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34120849323 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 212.727598566 49% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 618.680645161 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.9236252217 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.125 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.75 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22301087382 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884357844577 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123942343243 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14577647274 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662893883633 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 58.1214874552 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.17 8.01818996416 77% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 86.8835125448 29% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Most people will be adults and their gro...
^^^
Line 2, column 66, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'influencer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'influencers'.
Suggestion: influencers
...s and their growth depends on two great influencer: parents and friends. As we grow up we ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... two reasons to explore in this essay. First of all, we usually stay with our f...
^^^
Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...academy. Hence, we usually hang out with friends all day. When we become high sch...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t important influence in young adults. Secondly, you and friends hobbies are th...
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Line 6, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...w students play with them like a group. Because their hobbies are the same. And they te...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...y don’t want to talk to their parents. In conclusion, I think friends are the b...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...ually stay with our friends. In addition,we and our friends’ hobbies are the same. ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd our friends’ hobbies are the same.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 1977.66487455 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 204.0 407.700716846 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71568627451 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34120849323 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 212.727598566 49% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 618.680645161 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.9236252217 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.125 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.75 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22301087382 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884357844577 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123942343243 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14577647274 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662893883633 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 58.1214874552 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.17 8.01818996416 77% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 86.8835125448 29% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.