a nation should require all of its students to study the same national cirriculum until they enter college write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position

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a nation should require all of its students to study the same national cirriculum until they enter college.
write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. in developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The statement claims all the students who are getting their education lower than collage should take the same national curriculum. The assessment is unconvincing because the society needs various specialists on different areas and limiting the students to walk on a single path until their high school graduation would minimize the possibility of flourishing.
Everyone are specialized in different area innately. it is better for oneself to spend more time on what the one got the talent because of the satisfaction. it is impregnable that the more time the person spent on a single area, the more skilled and erudite the person will be. if the student could not spend time on what the student is good at because effort is also required on other fields, the student would become further from becoming an expert.
Besides, the society does not require people who are modicum at every fields. rather, although the one lacks on one field, if he or she is excellent on another field, the society would prefer that person. To make a sustainable society, people who are talented in different area, such as politicians, economists, managers, scientist, should lead the society. limiting the students by the same national curriculum will make the student less specialized, leading to less sustainable society.
The proponents contend there would be confusion when a such talented people have fundemental misunderstanding on different fields. because the world trend is heading to fusion between the fields, it is inevitable to make the students to understand on other fields by the same national curriculum.
However, it does not justify the reinforcement of identical national crriculum. Mixing two fields does not mean the one should understand the both fields profoundly. The reason as to why the world trend is heading that way is observing from the new aspect brings innovation because the conventional perspective is at stalemate. if the student on mechanics, trying to encourage new insights on electronics, starts to learn about electronics, the one will also get used to the conventional view on electronics. The student will fail to bring to innovation the electronics, the one will become just like other experts or rather, worse thinking about the lack of time that the student could spend on the field.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18449197861 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87207223729 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486631016043 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.450760459 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.058823529 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70588235294 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113566246535 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402166910027 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408947291032 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0703944118055 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231031032997 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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