Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The importance of education is accepted by most people. It is also admissible that teachers play a decisive role in educating students. However, it is a controversial topic of whether teachers should have different salaries according to the level of learning shown by their students. While some people are supportive of this idea, I think that this measure will result in several problems.
To begin with, it is highly probable that a lot of teachers would push their students to the extreme if they would be paid differently according to the performances of the students. As a viable option to evaluate students’ level of learning, test scores would be emphasized more than ever. In this circumstance, many teachers would try hard to get incentives or prevent the decrease in salaries and impose pressure on their students. It is even imaginable that some of those teachers use verbal and physical violence to force their students to get high scores in examinations. In several East Asian countries, such as South Korea and China, the level of competition between teachers is already high. As secondary schools advertise their names by stressing the number of students who enter prestigious universities, they force teachers to guarantee high test scores of students. As a result, many teachers press their students and this vicious cycle would be exacerbated if the salaries of teachers would start to be different based on the performances of the students.
In addition, although the roles of teachers are significant in education, there are other conditions influencing the learning of students. For example, the average incomes of specific neighborhoods are germane to the performances of students as they have fewer resources to study compared to their counterparts in more wealthy areas. Therefore, it would be a mistake if students’ low level of learning is totally attributed to teachers and their salaries fluctuate as a consequence. In fact, a number of teachers in developing countries, especially those who working in public schools, are frustrated by the students’ lack of passion to learn because of economic hardships. In this situation, differentiating the salaries of teachers according to the students’ level of learning would worsen the circumstance only.
In conclusion, paying teachers in accordance with the students’ level of studying does not seem to be a rational idea. As aforementioned, this policy would result in critical side effects. Therefore, other measures should be considered to increase the academic achievements of students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37037037037 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10551524963 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483950617284 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6992210343 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.473684211 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238112093134 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833592186305 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548667174616 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157471449286 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300260378083 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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