Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some educationalist think that learning musical stuffs should consider as a mandatory subject for all students. I completely disagree with this statement as it can bear loads of hamper to the whole education system.

Making compulsory of an unimportant subject like music would convey loads of drawbacks to the system of a school. The first major problem is that the students will loose their attention from their main subject. Music is an enjoyable thing and playing the instruments of it is much more celebrating, and if pupils have the chance to play any kind of musical stuff into their school, their full attention will go to the class of music rather than concentrating in their main classes. Therefore, they will do a bad result in exams and fall their future into the vain.

Furthermore, musical instrument is so costly that it is harder or almost impossible for some family. In our region of Asia, most of the people are middle class and they would not like to purchase any items beyond their capacity. So, if the schools make this subject compulsory, most of the students belongs from average income family will leave schools resulted in the major part of the manpower will remain illiterate.

One the other hand, this music playing classes can be held on a separated place. For example, in our area, Bangladesh, there are numerous schools for dance classes and learning to play musical instruments. Therefore, the person who is willing to learn music go to that type of school.

In conclusion, forcing students to learn music at their school will not be a fair for a education system, it should be leave on students willingness.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92114695341 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63613188217 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551971326165 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2937935275 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.615384615 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158630334197 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637240160747 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512421739558 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100159109359 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287300946404 0.056905535591 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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