The pie chart compares the amount of used energy and greenhouse emissions in the Australian household sector Overall the most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that heating and water heating have the highest share in energy use and greenhouse

Essay topics:

The pie chart compares the amount of used energy and greenhouse emissions in the Australian household sector. Overall, the most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that heating and water heating have the highest share in energy use and greenhouse emissions, respectively.

Moving a more detailed analysis, heating is the most energy using sector, at 42%, while its share in greenhouse emissions is decreased to 15 %. The change in other appliance proportion is also considerable. Although it accounts for less than a fifth of total energy use, it represents one of the largest greenhouse gas emissions at near 28%.

Less change is seen in the remaining sectors. Water heating has the second proportion in energy consumption, devoting less than a third of total energy consumption, and its share in greenhouse gas emissions remains stable at 32%. It is also the case for cooling, which increases slightly to 3% of greenhouse emissions. Both lighting and refrigerator experience a similar change, and their share in greenhouse emissions increase two times, at 8% and 14 %, respectively.

Fatemeh Norouzi
Task1- academic

The pie chart compares the amount of used energy and greenhouse emissions in the Australian household sector. Overall, the most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that heating and water heating have the highest share in energy use and greenhouse emissions, respectively.

Moving a more detailed analysis, heating is the most energy using sector, at 42%, while its share in greenhouse emissions is decreased to 15 %. The change in other appliance proportion is also considerable. Although it accounts for less than a fifth of total energy use, it represents one of the largest greenhouse gas emissions at near 28%.

Less change is seen in the remaining sectors. Water heating has the second proportion in energy consumption, devoting less than a third of total energy consumption, and its share in greenhouse gas emissions remains stable at 32%. It is also the case for cooling, which increases slightly to 3% of greenhouse emissions. Both lighting and refrigerator experience a similar change, and their share in greenhouse emissions increase two times, at 8% and 14 %, respectively.

Fatemeh Norouzi
Task1- academic

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 961.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3687150838 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9574890621 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581005586592 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4262828295 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.566783969036 0.215688989381 263% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21020346102 0.103423049105 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.226334181831 0.0843802449381 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.466591187376 0.15604864568 299% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.306571338764 0.0819641961636 374% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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