People have always been needed recommendation in order to understand whether the work they are doing is true or not. In this regard, some people believe that grandparents’ advice is the best source of figuring out what is true or false for their grandchildren; however I have enough reasons to object to this point of view, and I will illustrate some of which in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, unprecedented burgeoning of technology in the recent decades has thoroughly affected humans’ lives, so grandparents’ tips which belong to their period cannot be helpful for their grandchildren. To put it in a more vivid picture, nowadays, there are a number of advanced objects with which children can solve their problems. In stark contrast, those objects did not exist during their grandparents’ period. As a way of illustration, take computers. Older members of society cannot use it, while children do almost all of their work with it. As a result, grandparents cannot even give any advice about that since they are not cognizant of how it works.
Secondly, exponentially growing the internet makes exchanging information rate reach a level more advanced than ever before, which cause a lot of bad impact on children one of which is the changes in people’s cultures. It is especially true about youngsters who are more susceptible than other generations since they do not have enough experience. To clarify this point, children can collect a considerable amount of information on the internet in the blink of an eye, so they learn new things. Thus, they tend to turn their back on old traditions, so grandparents’ guidance cannot come in handy in their lives. Take social media, for example. There are a number of online groups, children can join and learn new things, which motivates them to forget their own cultures. Consequently, grandparents’ recommendations cannot be useful.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that coming from the world of 50 years ago, grandparents cannot give valuable suggestions to their grandchildren. It is due to the fact that, not only are grandparents not familiar with new technology, but also grandchildren are prone to forget their grandparents’ cultures and their way of living.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17438692098 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14968697353 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566757493188 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9177526507 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.705882353 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261824038454 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802786464914 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915998431075 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17224561746 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114383471722 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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