In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. Reducing Costs First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another. Preventing Errors Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error. Aiding Research Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The benefits of keeping electronic records over hand written documents have been considered uncertain by many. Both the lecture and the article are in the opposite ends about the benefits of electronic medical records. The former casts doubts on the hypotheses about the benefits of digital recordings over manual prescriptions. While the latter offers several theories to justify the advantages of e-print medical documents.
The first point of dispute is revolving around the comparison of costs of these two data storing methods. The instructor finds the difference insignificant and quickly discards the idea. She mentions that the doctors have to maintain paper and pen in the emergency cases since they have to write and put signature immediately after viewing a patient. As the need for papers can't be eliminated, there will be no savings as highlighted in the text. Nonetheless, the reading passage claims that since electronic documents don't require any separate space to store or carry, it will eliminate the associated costs.
Another point of debate is connected with the relative accuracy of these two methods. The professor opposes the idea that the electronic version will be free of errors. She affirms that the doctors will check the patients and write down the necessary information along with the suitable medicine names by their own hands. Later those information will be plugged into the digital device by the medical staffs. Since the hand writing of the doctors still can be obscured or not legible, there may be significant errors in the digital system as well. However, the author if the text believes that the standard format and clear texts will result in error free health services.
Last but not the least, the final argument focuses on the possibility of research with the medical data. For the last time the speaker denies the claim and poses that medical data are difficult to access because they are subjected to privacy law. Furthermore she cites the system of US medical law and confirms that researchers have to struggle a lot to obtain the necessary medical data for their research. She adds that it will be difficult as most of the patients don't want to disclose their data publicly but only for their treatment issue. In contrast, the writer of the passage claims that after employing the e-devices, there will be enough facilities to conduct research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...iewing a patient As the need for papers cant be eliminated there will be no savings ...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... claims that since electronic documents dont require any separate space to store or ...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...medicine names by their own hands Later those information will be plugged into the digital device...
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Line 7, column 464, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ll be difficult as most of the patients dont want to disclose their data publicly bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, well, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1373.03311258 144% => OK
No of words: 392.0 270.72406181 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05357142857 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51773049327 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 145.348785872 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522959183673 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 419.366225166 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 13.0662251656 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 392.0 21.2450331126 1845% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.2860985944 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1981.0 110.228320801 1797% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 392.0 21.698381199 1807% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 91.0 7.06452816374 1288% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218414038164 0.272083759551 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218414038164 0.0996497079465 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123845507774 0.162205337803 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474989357573 0.0443174109184 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 198.4 13.3589403974 1485% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -326.4 53.8541721854 -606% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 5.55761589404 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 156.2 11.0289183223 1416% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.49 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 27.31 8.42419426049 324% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 105.0 63.6247240618 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.7273730684 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 158.8 10.498013245 1513% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 159.0 11.2008830022 1420% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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