Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people do not earn enough money to support their kids’ studies, so some parents in order to educate their children help them to take out loans as education can be expensive. I agree with the statement because some children want to continue studying but often the economical situation limits their options.
To begin with, taking out loans is a good opportunity for students to dedicate all their attention to their studies without being required to work. Furthermore, higher education is costly. That is why many students choose to obtain a loan. However, obtaining a student loan in The United States is easier than in other countries. For example, the government of El Salvador does not have the option for students to decide whether or not they want to take out a student loan. Therefore, many students who are working and studying at the same time in El Salvador give up on their dream. On the other hand, If El Salvador had the option to take out student loans as the USA does, many people would have achieved their degree; thus, the number of educated people in El Salvador would be higher. Therefore, a great advantage that students from The United States have over students from other countries is that they have the option to take out loans.
Secondly, students who have taken out a loan have better grades than students who have not. When students can dedicate fully to their studies without being worried about their tuition, they perform better in class and also they obtain higher grades because they are well rested, and focused. They also in their spare time practice some exercise such as yoga, cycling, and running. These factors play an important role in students' lives because exercise helps them to relieve stress. On the contrary, students who need to work to pay their tuition are less rested, and they do not study properly. Moreover, students who work and study need to put in extra effort and dedication but they do not always obtain their desired score due the lack of preparation. Therefore, they perform poorly in their exams. If they had taken out a loan, they would not have needed to work. Hence, they could dedicate themselves entirely to their studies without distractions.
Overall, taking out student loans to obtain higher education is important to be successful in modern society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...want to continue studying but often the economical situation limits their options. To ...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... have the option for students to decide whether or not they want to take out a student loan. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91392405063 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37612975853 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470886075949 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.483576108 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.05 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259820349754 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995606182137 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05831993874 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172680027213 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433033259178 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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