Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument cites that Woven baskets which have previously been discovered only in Palea village. Recently, have been discovered also in Lithos village. Adding, that there is a deep river and broad separate the two villages, and because no Plaean boats have been found, this is evidence that these baskets not uniquley belong to Palean village. This argument is rife of unwarranted assumptions and incomplete information, to evaluate this argument effeciently, the author should provide answers to the following questions and mention clearly the evidence that he depends on.
First, the author mentions that baskest recently have been found in Lithos village which is located across a deep and broad river on the other side of Plean village. The argument based on the previous information conclude that there is no way for Plaean people to cross to the Lithos village except the river. This evidence is unwarranted because the author overlooked to mention the geographic map to both village and he didn't state wether that river the only way to cross between two villages. For example, if we look at the map between the two villages and we fuond that there is another way for translocation between them, this means that there was a way to Palean people to trade exchange as well as culture exchange. If the previous situation is valid, that strongly support that Palean baskets perhaps belong only to Palean people and it transported through trade echange or so by the other way between the villages. Therefore, the argumnet is remarkably weakened.
Secondly, the argument says that because there are no boats are fouond belong to Plaean people that evidence to the argument conclusion. This conclusion is based on unwarranted assumption also, because not necessarily that because no traces for ancient Plaean boats are found, that indicates to the argument conclusion. For exapmle, what if there were boats but as time passed destroyed or have been used by Lithos people. Thus, the aother should provide more evidence that the archeologists investigated all the factors that perhaps affect the boats and proof that there were not any boats used to trasport Palean people between the villages. Otherwise, this conclusion which is drawn in the argument dosen't hold water.
In conclusion, the argument as stands now is significantly flawed because the aurthor relies on unguaranteed evidence. The author should provide the geographic evidence which proofs that there was no another way to trasport between the two village except river. Moreover, he or she should provide that archeaologists did all the inspection to discover where the Palean boats gone and wether there are any factors could be the reasons behide their vanish. All the prevuious information the author should clearly state the evidence behind them to make this argument evaluation feasible.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2355 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.086 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.541 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.554 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.351 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 422, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e geographic map to both village and he didnt state wether that river the only way to...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 197, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ic evidence which proofs that there was no another way to trasport between the two...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20390455531 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60867971167 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418655097614 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.967530078 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.263157895 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189763775654 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735393230741 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854435392859 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126683422546 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805405294631 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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