Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with and why?
In the modern era, parents’ behavior towards their children plays prominent role in societies. Due to the fact that children are the future people in the society, their personality has great influence on every country's growth. An unavoidable query which has been always the topic of contention and brought about heated debates is whether parents should pay their children a small amount of money (as a reward) for their house working tasks or not. Whether one agrees or disagrees with this depends on the lens through which one is looking. Both adherents and opponents have provided substantial reasons for the option they support. From my vantage point, it is better for children to receive money from their parents due to their helps in house works even though some might find this controversial. In what follows, I will delve into the most paramount reasons to substantiate my perspective.
First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that gaining parents' satisfaction sense can boost the children's self-esteem. In other words, the children who are encouraged by their parents feel that they are doing such an important task that needs appreciation. Besides, the children may learn that every work they do deserves rewards. In addition, they realize that without doing their task, they will not achieve any result. The more the children strive, the more they attain bonus. For the purpose of illustration, I like to mention a result of research conducted recently by Harvard University. The findings underscore the fact that children who earn reward from their parents for doing the house work (or doing their homework and study their lessons) have significant stimulus to work hard in every aspect of their lives.
The second pivotal reason that is worth being taken into account meticulously is that giving money to youngsters will help them to learn manage their expenses and take the responsibility of having money. Giving money to children can not only prospers their independency but also gives them an opportunity to buy their stuff. No one can cast a shadow of doubt that children enjoy buying latest devices and toys. To shed light on this issue, take a personal experience as an example; when I was a child, I did not contribute in jobs around the home although my parents did their best to persuade me to help them and to take responsibility. One day my teacher told my father I need an impetus to work in home. After that my father gave me 1 dollar for every day I helped my mother in house works. I enjoyed a lot to see my parents giving money to me, and I could buy a bicycle. Then my personality shifted from an isolated child to a person who has perseverance.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons leads us to conclude that self-confidence improvement as well as responsibility and perseverance are benefits of giving money to children as a reward for their jobs in home. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my point of view. Moreover, an important issue that should be borne in mind is that this cannot be considered for all children and some counterexamples might exist. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this crucial question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to manage'
Suggestion: to manage
...y to youngsters will help them to learn manage their expenses and take the responsibil...
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Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'prosper'
Suggestion: prosper
.... Giving money to children can not only prospers their independency but also gives them ...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'buying the latest'.
Suggestion: buying the latest
...t a shadow of doubt that children enjoy buying latest devices and toys. To shed light on this...
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Line 3, column 745, Rule ID: ANINFOR_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for everyday'?
Suggestion: for everyday
.... After that my father gave me 1 dollar for every day I helped my mother in house works. I en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, well, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92998204668 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78784039353 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518850987433 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7064130475 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.615384615 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4230769231 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317369115304 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836443841249 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078021869109 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190225316784 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716298808873 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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