Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Some people argue that most companies make advertisement of authentic products and has better quality than it has been shown in television. They cite that if they do not advertise quality goods then they would their consumers. So, to earn their trust they give genuine advertisement to support their points. However I disagree with these people and believe that almost advertisement make commodities that seems much attractive than reality. I will support my view point with two reasons.
First of all, many companies broadcasted advertisement with prominent words and slogan to attract more consumers. For instance, there is one detergent powder advertisement called tide, which is frequently comes in television with slogan that "if there is tide, there is no dirt" which attract more consumers, but in reality it does not make as clean as what it is publishing. It is important to attract more consumers because without attracting mesmerizing costumers the company could not gain gigantic profit. Thus, the most advertisements prefer to make the products that seems great, but not best in real world.
Secondly, many advertisement companies use magnified and colorful pictures and light to increase people's willingness of shopping. To illustrate the fact about super markets and malls, they use various strategy to manipulate the consumers through wonderful advertisements, and encourage them to buy more and more. It is important to proliferate the desire of consumers to purchase more because if advertisement company does not make wonderful advertisement then the companies could not compete with their competitors which boost up their cost and dramatically decline in their shares. Therefore, the most advertisement make a good that is actually less genuine than real.
To sum up, the issue of whether most advertisement make goods which is wonderful than they actually is in real is complex. Some suggested that it is better as shown in television because if they advertise phony products then they obviously lose consumers in long-term. Nevertheless, I still contend that usually most advertisement are fake than it shown in television and that attract more consumers and increase the consumers to purchase more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43965517241 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00089579042 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488505747126 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1775692742 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.3125 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274300621264 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10882878152 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618035498629 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187588481493 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800697909649 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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