Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
World events, the foundation of society's development, have been valued and even trigger a heated discussion over whether it is important to learn about world events or not. World events, in many people's views, are not vital, because they are unlikely to affect our life. Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that events happening around the world are significant for people, due to their contributions to academic performance and sterling qualities.
What must be prioritized is that learning about world events, rather than not knowing these events, is beneficial to people's academic learning, by extending their knowledge and cultivating their interests. To begin with, only by learning more about world events, can people reap a wider range of expertise. In detail, the more I watch the news, the more I reap and harvest a variety of knowledge from all over the world, and I would know more about history, arts, science, and something like that, which could expand my outlook; on the other hand, under no circumstances can I know such a large amount of knowledge if I do not learn about world events. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of world events in fostering people's interests. To explain it further, once, when I was reading a piece of science paper, it introduced a kind of new computer technology, and I found it so interesting, so after I entered university, I chose computer science as my major; however, it is impossible to foster my interest if I do not read the paper.
What is equally worth discussing is that by knowing about world events, instead of not learning about these events, people can promote their sterling qualities, by improving their persistence and innovation. First, it is well-known that people can learn about scientists' stories from the news. To be specific, Steven Jobs, the former CEO of Apple, was fired by his partners, but he never gave up, so he returned to the company and made it the biggest one in the world; in contrast, there is no chance for people to learn about this story if they do not know about world events. Furthermore, after people know about many events and news, they could be more innovative. Specifically, it is well-knowledged that we can gain various latest technology processes by reading papers, so we would learn how to invent new technologies, which can boost our innovation; on the contrary, will we be more innovative when we don't know the latest technologies?
Academic performance, the foundation of people's success, can be boosted, if they learn more about world events. Sterling qualities, the bedrock of people's development, should be facilitated when they know more about events happening around the world. In conclusion, only by learning more about world events, rather than not knowing about these events, can people reap numerous benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05296610169 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8038419273 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463983050847 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.5251618826 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0625 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181116995531 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855118404815 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044581568673 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144470240428 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372767159287 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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