Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments' funding, the money from annual taxes, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether governments should spend more money to support the arts or athletics. Spending more money in support of the arts, in many people's views, should be advocated. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that governments should spend more money to support the athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams, due to the contributions to people's personal qualities and skills.
What must be prioritized is that spending more money on athletics, instead of costing funding to support the arts, is beneficial to people's personal qualities, by teaching them more persisting and independence. Initially, it is athletics that offers people the importance of persisting. To be more specific, by watching the athletes' industrious preparation, people can acquire the invaluable quality of persisting, helping them to overcome straits in the future; in contrast, such important qualities can not be obtained when they are appreciating the arts. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of athletics to people's independent quality. To explain it further, by learning about the athletes' competition with others, people will find it more indispensable to be independent, in that way they will be more competitive to work or study. On the other hand, will they be more independent when seeing the arts?
What is equally worth discussing is that costing funding to support athletics, rather than helping the arts, can promote people's personal skills, by strengthening their interpersonal skills and teamwork skills. To begin with, it is well acknowledged that appreciating athletes' competitions can improve people's interpersonal skills. Specifically, by watching more interviews about great athletes, people can learn how to communicate with each other better; on the contrary, under no circumstance will they gain a better understanding of interpersonal skills if they are skimming the arts in the museum. Furthermore, when having a deeper comprehension of athletics, people will become more adept in teamwork skills. In detail, the more sports they participate in, the more interactions they will involve in, stimulating them to foster their cooperation and improve social capability; however, it is impossible for them to get better teamwork skills when making paintings.
Personal qualities, the foundation of people's future development, will be boosted when they learn more about athletics. Personal skills, essential contributors to people's future success, will be facilitated, if they participate more in athletics. In conclusion, only by spending more money to support athletics, instead of costing funding for the arts, can governments help people to reap numerous benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... should be advocated. Contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that governme...
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Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'athletes'' or 'athlete's'?
Suggestion: athletes'; athlete's
...plain it further, by learning about the athletes competition with others, people will fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65165876777 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14540679828 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46682464455 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.94265232975 364% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8633891062 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.294117647 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8235294118 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210535648111 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092168875832 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836992458901 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169450649354 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116306750075 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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