People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Why do some choose violence, while others choose peace? Why are some passive in their character while others leap into the fray? The drivers of our behavior are difficult to pin down, but it should be noted that, by no means, are we driven by forces of our own making. In fact, larger forces outside of our control direcly influence our behavior.
Firsly, consider how uncontrolable natural forces have molded members of society. For those individuals living in arid climates, such as the Sahara or Mongolian desserts, life has been observed to be nomatic in-nature as people travel from place to place in search of scare resources: water, shelter, and salt. In more temperete climates slightly above and below the equator, the weather allows for an agricultural base to form. People from these less hostile climates are able to form stable social grouping and build complex societies, often resulting in a better quality of life. It is clear, therefore, that natural forces have a strong bearing on people's behavior, a force that no society has yet been able to control.
Furthermore, the economics circumstances of one's upbringing has been shown to directly contribute to one's character and mannerisms. Within the United States, cross-sectional studies of social groupings - between suburban families and urban families - highlighted a distinct differnce in upbringing. Specifically, the urban families were more likely to be victims of violent crimes relative to suburban families, on a per-capital basis. Furthermore, a longitudinal study of urban teens were shown to be more pugnacious than their subsurban peers, illustrating how prolonged exposure to violent enviornments forces individuals to adapt, embracing violence themselves. From this study, it is clear how one's surroundings - a factor outside of his or her collective control - can shape one's behavior.
Finally, recent discoveries in the field of genetics has revealed how one is at the mercy of our own genes. Alcoholism and gambling are two vices often attributed to addicts with low willpower. However, this assumption may be missing the mark. Analysis of large samples of genomes pertaining to addicts have shown that there are severeal key genetic markers unique to these individuals not found in control populations. The research draws attention to the fact that addicts are predisposed to enter into dopamine cycles than the average individual in society, a hanpenstance of genetic randomness assigned at birth. Thus, the resulst of these studies underscore how forces outside our control influence our behavior.
Some cite "free will" in their efforts to explain people's behavior; in that, all are able to choose their actions freely, and thus no outside powers can influence our behavior. Yet, this view is limited in its assessment of the human condition. People's behaviors are influences by a myriad of outside factors outside our control, including those natural, economic, and genetic in origin. The truth is that we are at the mercy of larger forces in the world, hence why there is such variance in human behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2622.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31845841785 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83962379104 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553752535497 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7330198549 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.25 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5416666667 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112954238227 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321015806054 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269461833198 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654553622383 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176749066313 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 100.480337079 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.