Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.  Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
  Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
  Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Personally, I totally agree with the statement that lives have becoming easier now than they were when my grandparents were kids, because the technology and education have made people be more likely to fulfill their desire.

Firstly, transportation means have made it easier and more possible for people to move around the world. Thinking of cars, trains and airplanes, which are increasing the speed of people moving from one place to another, these transport methods could not be imagined when my grandparents were children. When they were young, the advanced transportation method is bicycles, which were the representations of wealth, and my grandma could never picture that people could move from the northern-most to the southern-most in one day, even on the express train. So, the rapid transportation methods are making the world a better place to live in.

Secondly, the computer technology is leading one of the most evolution in the whole world, which started at the end of the last century. Today, we could easily find what we want to know, and the invention of digital storage has made the data storage unbelievably convenient and small. And with the development of internet, we could connect with the rest of the world easily. We could get access to many big online worldwide libraries through a few clicks or presses on keyboard, which used to be really hard in the first few decades of the last century.

Furthermore, the increasing focus on education, especially in China, which has put so much attention and investment in high-level education, has improved the knowledge background of human being. When my grandparents were young, they could only get primary school education in the local village because of the lack of well-trained teachers and the release from the World War II. With the increasing access to education, people could know more about humanity and science, which can make people feel happier than before, since the release of struggles from the unawareness of basic understanding could let people follow the step of other developed countries.

Thus, as the world is developing so rapidly through the last eighty years, people are filling more satisfied about their life now than before, especially when China was suffered from the war back in my grandma's age.

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lives have becoming easier now
lives are becoming easier now
lives have been becoming easier now

flaws:
You over used 'which':

Thinking of cars, trains and airplanes, which are increasing the speed of people moving from one place to another

is bicycles, which were the representations of wealth, and my grandma could never picture

most evolution in the whole world, which started at the end of the last century.

and more...

Don't repeat one single structure. More sentences varieties wanted.

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1874 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.984 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.792 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'well']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235294117647 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.141176470588 0.158761421928 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0894117647059 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0752941176471 0.046263068375 163% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0376470588235 0.0685040099705 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117647058824 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.04 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6917643968 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0211764705882 0.0309702414327 68% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0941176470588 0.0887237588012 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235294117647 0.0209618222197 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0305882352941 0.0139019557991 220% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2309.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 380.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07631578947 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255263157895 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171052631579 0.174417080927 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126315789474 0.112833075102 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6917643968 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534210526316 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 59.2004703695 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 29.2307692308 20.5533526081 142% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7146343259 48.84282405 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.615384615 120.699889404 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2307692308 20.5533526081 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.644075263715 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 54.7570850202 45.7405998639 120% => OK
Elegance: 1.5462962963 1.45489161554 106% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243699885746 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.157039257874 0.103427244359 152% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0624478376261 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.702475834031 0.497263757937 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152249506036 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125324100281 0.114077575197 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472049673262 0.0781384742642 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.411139625033 0.336927656856 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0965064054165 0.067059652881 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175583362003 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043070946471 0.0618886996521 70% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK

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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 21 Out of 30