1. Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so- called Palean baskets were not uniquely Paean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author contends that the Palean baskets were not confined to the Palean district. The evidence that the writer shows is that the Palean baskets were found in Lithos, which is a place crossing the Brim River from Palea. However, the author assumes that in order to cross the River, the people in Palean district should have used boats to go across but no boats were found in Lithos. There are several flaws in the author's conclusion. More evidence should be given to make the author's claim more valid.
First, the author assumes that the very deep Brim river has been in that place from the very past when Palean baskets were first developed. However, the Brim river could have existed hundreds of years after the first Palean baskets were developed. To be specific, the Palean baskets could have been uniquely Paleans' but due to some geological changes in the Palean district, the Brim river could have taken place in the area, dividing the original Palean district into two, Palean and Lithos. Therefore, the time when the Brim river first existed should be investigated in order to make a clear conclusion that the Palean baskets found in Lithos means that the Palean baskets were not Palean's unique object.
Secondly, the writer presumes that the only way to cross the Brim river was through the boats. However, there could be other sources than boats to across Brim river. The Palean people could have used sea animals to send the baskets to Lithos. In this case, since the sea animals do not exist until now, we cannot conclude firmly that the Palean baskets were not uniquely of Palean's contending that we cannot find the sea animals in Lithos. Or, there could have been no artificial sources to cross the river. There could have been severe precipitation in the area in the period when Palean baskets were first made. The rain could have naturally sent the basket to Lithos. Therefore, additional information about the sources that could send the basket to Lithos from Palean should be checked in order to confirm the author's claim.
Finally, the author could still claim that in that time of the years, there were only boats to send the basket to Lithos. However, hundreds of years could have past since the transporting of the basket. Due to the years gap from that time to current times, the boat could have dissolved and disappeared. The boats in the past were mostly made of wood and wood is the material that disappears in the ground. Therefore, the Palean basket could have been the Palean's original one and were sent to Lithos. So geologists should check further to check the existence of the old boats in Lithos.
The above three information should be checked, at least, in order to confirm the author's claim that the Palean basket is not uniquely Paleans'. The geological change in the vicinity of Palean, the sources of transportation through Brim river, and the existence of boats should be checked thoroughly to make a more plausible claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK. better to say: maybe the river was shallow in the ancient time and people can cross it easily.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. from the prompt: 'no Palean boats have been found', but it doesn't mean people from other villages can't have boats, maybe they come to Palean by their boats.
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flaws:
No. of Different Words: 165 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2407 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.72 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.162 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.584 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.56 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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The author contends that the Palean bask...
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... Lithos. There are several flaws in the authors conclusion. More evidence should be giv...
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...n to make the authors claim more valid. First, the author assumes that the ...
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...ets were not Paleans unique object. Secondly, the writer presumes that the o...
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...order to confirm the authors claim. Finally, the author could still claim th...
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... transporting of the basket. Due to the years gap from that time to current times, th...
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...istence of the old boats in Lithos. The above three information should be ch...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'at least']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.270462633452 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.17615658363 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0498220640569 0.0836205057962 60% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0551601423488 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00355871886121 0.0272364105082 13% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.103202846975 0.125424944231 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0516014234875 0.0416121511921 124% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.23185149414 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0409252669039 0.026700313972 153% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.133451957295 0.113004496875 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0391459074733 0.0255425247493 153% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0106761565836 0.0127820249294 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3006.0 2731.13054187 110% => OK
No of words: 510.0 446.07635468 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89411764706 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.337254901961 0.378187486979 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213725490196 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.111764705882 0.208842608468 54% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0607843137255 0.135150697306 45% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.23185149414 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 207.018472906 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.339215686275 0.469332199767 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 38.9856801784 52.1807786196 75% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6922321466 57.7814097925 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.24 141.986410481 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.7725490196 51.9672348444 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.81060606061 1.8405768891 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449153868194 0.441005458295 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.18399646283 0.135418324435 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0957536830745 0.0829849096947 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.640068189592 0.58762219726 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133656991267 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.230975198819 0.193483328276 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073163235333 0.0970749176394 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.67482082608 0.42659136922 158% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0571453632884 0.0774707102158 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.359635749011 0.312017818177 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405676062743 0.0698173142475 58% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.82512315271 352% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 14.0 2.82389162562 496% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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