A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human modern society, people more and more tend to build their societies. Actually, people’s attitudes toward this issue are varied from person to person. Although some people are in the conviction that allocating some money to support art leads to protect their culture, I believe spending some money to support environment due to a healthier life and informing people about the impact of their activities on nature.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to spend some money to develop environment is having a healthier life. In fact, as time marches on, air pollution has become a major problem in most megacities as it continues to pose a potential threat to people’s health. Take a case of an old person or a patient who has a respiratory problem for instance. Not only does it damage their immune systems, but also it limits their daily activities especially in winter when the pollutants in the weather are intensified, so undoubtedly a detailed and careful plan and a large annual budget are needed to reducing air pollution and its adverse effects on the environment and human. There are several ways to encounter with this major problem; for example, renewal energy should be substituted for burning fossil fuels which cause a lot of harmful gases. Also, a group of scientists has recently reached a technology for producing a fuel from the waste of animals, which is less harmful but more expensive to manufacture. Hence, this money can be given to one of these research teams to complete their researches and even produce some quantity of these fuels.
A further more subtle point is that a large amount of money is required to warn people about their activities. It is noteworthy that, the environment is devastated in recent decades by human activities such as deforesting. Many people are unaware that they are jeopardizing their natural surroundings by their activities and if they are notified about that, they will stop them. Therefore, a large amount of money should spend for advertising about the harmful effects of cutting forest’s trees and broadcast through mass media. Moreover, training programs should be provided in order to teach people how they can extend green environment and how they can plant trees. It is essential People know they should maintain the balance of ecosystem since, trees, plant life, and people all depend on each other. An unhealthy environment can have harmful effects on the ecosystem. For example, if a plant dies because of changes to the environment and that plant is food for an animal, that animal will not have any food. If humans use that animal as a food source, it leads to a big problem.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear that the company should invest in environment issues including reducing air pollution as well as an informed community about catastrophic events that may happen as a result of their activities. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that without enough invest people can extend green environment. It is anticipated, if companies do not allocate money to environment’s plans, next generation will confront with critical situations.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251231527094 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.155993431856 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0886699507389 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0344827586207 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.047619047619 0.0685040099705 70% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11986863711 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0443349753695 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.47398552892 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0361247947455 0.0309702414327 117% => OK
Particles: 0.00164203612479 0.00188951952338 87% => OK
Determiners: 0.0968801313629 0.0887237588012 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229885057471 0.0209618222197 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0131362889984 0.0139019557991 94% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3341.0 2387.08602151 140% => OK
No of words: 542.0 408.028673835 133% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16420664207 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381918819188 0.338922669872 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265682656827 0.251872472559 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190036900369 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134686346863 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47398552892 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520295202952 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 63.7521980754 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5652173913 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2880450863 48.84282405 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.260869565 120.699889404 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5652173913 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.826086956522 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 50.133483074 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.74482758621 1.45489161554 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375895437532 0.300154397459 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116657914826 0.103427244359 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0876748459849 0.0752933317313 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.474237602987 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170221141988 0.151897553556 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130165142027 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896558881308 0.0781384742642 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.323866953069 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.188670558974 0.067059652881 281% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226809731977 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127362462855 0.0618886996521 206% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8870967742 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.86379928315 388% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 8.42114695341 24% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 12.0 2.4623655914 487% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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