TOEFL 22 October 2016
Some teenagers take part in different kinds of activities such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support?
Some people think that teenagers can’t handle additional classes and it’s better to concentrate their main activity, while others believe that it is an appropriate idea to have other helpful classes. From my vantage point, teenagers can have other activities along with their main activity because of its some beneficiaries. Not only do they need variety, but also they can benefit from other classes to improve their main activity. I subscribe this way which I will explore in the following essay.
The first exquisite point to mention is that variety is needed not only for teenagers but also all people. If teenagers for example, just do their assignments and they go to their school every day routinely without having any other special activities probably, they will hate from their only activity. According to the many psychological papers and TV programs, it is better to add some colors to our lives and enjoy our lives in order to prevent to be the uniformity situation of life. A vivid example can be shed light on this subject is my own experience. When I was a first-year high-school student, at the first semester I didn’t have appropriate average especially unsuccessful performance in English class. I decided to have additional conversation English class outside from the school. It was a little irrelevant to the topics of English but, I continued it to participate. At the end of the semester, although I have slight improvements in my English grade while in total average my grade was better than the past. Honestly, I think variety helped me increase my scores in the school.
Another reason that deserves some words is that I strongly believe additional activity can help us improve our performance in the main activity. Of course, this is also true for the teenagers. Some classes like sports activities and another ilk cause them have a healthier life and consequently, they will be ready to learn the materials of the school as the main activity. Sometimes, variety can help teenagers to access their goals easily. Being familiar with the other activities, teenagers may decide better and consciously about their future and the major which they want to continue. As an effective example, in the high-school, I continued my English conversation classes. These classes improved my English speaking and also improved my grades in English classes in the second and third year of my high-school. Also, when I attended at the university I chose English teaching as my major because I thought I was talented and I had sufficient background in English. Therefore, the additional class worked well in my life.
To make long story short, I assert that additional classes and activities are useful in the light of the aforementioned reasons. Certainly, additional activities can help teenagers reach their goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, honestly, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, well, while, for example, i think, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11827956989 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87602229132 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486021505376 0.524837075471 93% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7867317077 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1666666667 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147763406561 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471267910181 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415669339582 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115259211274 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413426954727 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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