Statistics gathered over the past three decades show that the death rate is higher among those who do not have jobs than among those with regular employment. Unemployment, just like heart disease and cancer, is a significant health issue. While many health care advocates promote increased government funding for medical research and public health care, it would be folly to increase government spending if doing so were to affect the nation’s economy adversely and ultimately cause a rise in unemployment. A healthy economy means healthy citizens.
This letter adverts that death rates of unemployed people are higher compared to employed ones. Correspondingly, they suggest a intermediate solution such that they should increase government funding for further medical research. However, government should make a detailed analysis and elaborate the profiles of this unemployed people before taking an action without causing extra problems.
Firstly, possible explanation for this result is that these unemployed people can be a so reluctant and lazy individual that they do not look after themselves well or give importance balanced nutrition even they can afford, further, they can have psychological disease. Related to these facts, they may be more likely to die young regardless of their job status. Accordingly, we expect that also they have trouble in finding a job. All things considered imply that government should reckon on general profile of these people.
Besides this, they may talk about too low death rates, that is, low employed death rates are even lower than unemployed death rates relatively. In this case, they will take a risk for small percents. Allocating government fund to this medical research can create larger problems and damage economic balance.
Thirdly, last point worth to mention is that these people may suffer from poor education levels. In this case, increasing government education centers for different specialties are more beneficial to these unemployment people since even they execute this plan and assure their claim in this case they should find a solution for unemployment rates.
In conclusion, government should conduct a research on these unemployed people, if results show that these are rates are directly to living conditions and following unemployment, then they should definitely increase employment fund and detailed medical research for ameliorated results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...yed ones. Correspondingly, they suggest a intermediate solution such that they sh...
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Line 9, column 42, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...n conclusion, government should conduct a research on these unemployed people, if results ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 284.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60563380282 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76313117138 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595070422535 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.643214477 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.461538462 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 5.70786347227 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0586432551134 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272345647577 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340592418157 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0388638139695 0.128457276422 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224094954275 0.0628817314937 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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