01/10/2017
Popular events like to football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many believe organizing big sports events is crucial for normalizing relationships among states and discharging patriotic feelings of citizens in a peaceful way. I disagree with this prospect and below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, sporting occasions are important for alleviating international tensions. In fact, Olympic Games were reestablished in the XIX century in a hope to let nations rival each other in a calm, benevolent way when negative emotions to neighbors are being sublimated through associating with national teams or sportspersons who compete in an arena. Furthermore, watching such events as the football World Cup allows individuals who belong to different social classes and occupied on a variety of jobs to be united in their love to their team and state. So, patriotic emotions that otherwise may lead to aggression are released while supporting athletes who compete in a stadium. Thus, it is safe to say sports tournaments have an advantageous influence on an over-all international situation.
On the other hand, the proposed idea appears to be doubtful. Firstly, tensions among states are caused by past wars and conflicts of today’s interests. Those issues are not going to be solved through playing games. To illustrate, the Second World War could not have been stopped by holding any competitions because Germany’ longing to increase its territory would not be addressed in any tournament. Secondly, the nature of any sports event assumes that there are winners and losers. Thus, the people whose team failed to win feel rather a grievance and anger than relaxation and calmness. For an instance, almost any football match can turn into a riot if the fans believe that a judge was bribed or a game was unfair. Consequently, participating in a big competition among countries has some negative facets.
In conclusion, although popular sporting events could have a benevolent impact on an international situation, they do not essential for maintaining the peace among nations, moreover, they occasions may stir people’s discontent.
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Essay evaluation report
they do not essential for maintaining the peace among nations
they are not essential for maintaining the peace among nations
they occasions may stir people’s discontent.
the occasions may stir people’s discontent.
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flaws:
Duplicated contents:
sportspersons who compete in an arena.
athletes who compete in a stadium.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1742 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.922 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.012 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a peaceful way" with adverb for "peaceful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...charging patriotic feelings of citizens in a peaceful way. I disagree with this prospect and belo...
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Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...tournament. Secondly, the nature of any sports event assumes that there are winners an...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'occasion'
Suggestion: occasion
...the peace among nations, moreover, they occasions may stir people's discontent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35014836795 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06829230465 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640949554896 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.42432162 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.6875 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197519400428 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552452793125 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452413214109 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115237067972 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495587530234 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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