TPO50 -Integrated task

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TPO50 -Integrated task

Both the reading and the lecture discuss possible ways to travel to the Mars. The reading claims that it is impossible to go Mars even if the human were able to go Moon. These to destinations were different. However, the professor finds all the ideas dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
First off, the reading states that since it is a long distance travel to go Mars, there is the problem of enough supplies for astronauts to be survived. On the contrary, the lecturer dismisses the issue due to fact that there are kinds of plants that can grow in water instead of soil. Thus, astronauts can plant them during their trip as a source of food. In addition, she mentions that these plants utilize carbon dioxide and release oxygen which is the source of fresh air for astronauts.
Furthermore, the author implies that since astronauts are in zero gravity for a long period of time, it will put their health condition into danger. In contrast, the professor brings up the idea that there are some space stations in the space which have some astronauts as their habitats. They should learn how to manage this situation and do some exercises in order to get ready for that conditions. Also, they have to take some vitamins and minerals like calcium to augment the power of their muscle.
Last but not least, the reading argues that space radiation transmitted from the sun can cause harmful effect for the astronauts since there is no shielding. If they add shielding to the spacecraft, it will be to heavy. Conversely, the professor undermines the theory by proposing that solar radiation does not always dangerous. Just in some active periods, which is occasionally happened, it could be harmful. The professor adds that astronauts can manage it by monitoring the radiation. Also, they can built a small shield area to go there in case of exposing to solar radiation during their trip.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...tronauts are in zero gravity for a long period of time, it will put their health condition int...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: TO_TOO[4]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...shielding to the spacecraft, it will be to heavy. Conversely, the professor underm...
^^
Line 4, column 505, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...onitoring the radiation. Also, they can built a small shield area to go there in case...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81402439024 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51417567856 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545731707317 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1329625883 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7222222222 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.3589403974 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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