TPO50 -Integrated task

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TPO50 -Integrated task

In term of whether travel to the mars today is impossible or not the article and the lecturer contradict each other. the author in the reading states that traveling to the mars has a various challenge which is not easy as travel to the moon and states some reasons. on the other hand, the professor in the lecture refute this claim and states that travel to the mars has many difficulties but it is possible.
First, the author claims that the trip to the mars takes at least two years which it needs enough supplies of food, water, and oxygen. on the contrary, the lecturer refutes this claims and asserts that nowadays there is a technique which named hydroponic that help astronomer to grow plants and foods in the spacecraft. They use soil for cultivating everything in the space. moreover, they can recycle wastewater with evaporation and make fresh air by co2 emission and oxygen release.
secondly, the reading asserts that astronomer spending many times in the zero-gravity situation which leads to some negative aspects on their bodies such as, muscle weakening and lower bone density. in contrast, the speaker disclaims this idea and contends that several spaceships can maintain astronomers in the zero-gravity environment furthermore, there are some techniques which help to astronomers to preserve their bodies from any harm, for instance, regular exercise and calcium vitamins can help them.
Finally, the article points out that spacemen would be exposed to the detrimental level of solar radiation. The professor in the lecture cast doubt to this concept and profess that this radiation is not dangerous every time and that harmful effects are occasionally. in addition, there are many instruments which provide a safety shield for astronauts.
in the nutshell, according to the aforementioned reasons, the professor rejects author arguments and states that traveling to the mars in possible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and the lecturer contradict each other. the author in the reading states that trave...
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...el to the moon and states some reasons. on the other hand, the professor in the le...
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...gh supplies of food, water, and oxygen. on the contrary, the lecturer refutes this...
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...or cultivating everything in the space. moreover, they can recycle wastewater with evapo...
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...ir by co2 emission and oxygen release. secondly, the reading asserts that astronomer sp...
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...uscle weakening and lower bone density. in contrast, the speaker disclaims this id...
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... that harmful effects are occasionally. in addition, there are many instruments wh...
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...rovide a safety shield for astronauts. in the nutshell, according to the aforemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, at least, for instance, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19093851133 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73333877433 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550161812298 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3357470068 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.384615385 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5384615385 7.06452816374 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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