The growth of technology is helping us shape our world better.
In hardly two decades, technology blossomed from just a bud to a full grown flower. The growth was so rapid that for many it happened in just a blink of an eye while for others it changed overnight. Many have embraced it with open arms, not leaving a chance to explore the cave, that is technology. Some are seen revolting against the idea that things are getting done by machines, other than us. No matter the validity of the points, there is no denying that our world is changing, towards a more advanced stage.
The inundation of technology is overwhelming. There is hardly any procedure left that does not require the use of technical resources, be it medical or educational or for any general work. For instance, computers hold our complete information now, whether it is for hospital records, or for census or for government purposes. On one hand we vehemently cry for our right to privacy, and on the other we acquiescingly give our details to anyone who can provide us with virtual delight.
The same information that we readily give can be the reason of the entire humanity’s downfall. Our sacred details, which should only be known to us is in the hands of people we don’t know. Their potential is unknown to us. If we look back in history, the embryonic stage of genocide of Jews started by first collecting all their information, from their occupation, to residence and marital status. This made it easy for the totalitarian to separate Jews from Germans and persecute them. This anti-Semitic movement led to the death of millions of Jews and loss of property which was considered one of the biggest massacres in the history of violence. The saying that ‘History repeats itself’ should invoke trepidation in our hearts but that isn’t happening.
Our ignorant minds won’t consider the ill effects of the rapidly growing technology because we are busy savouring the sweet ease it provides to our day to day lives. Even though the benefits are high, we shouldn’t turn our backs to the problems we can someday face in the future. Our naivety can be the cause of our downfall and we should be ready to take the bad with the good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82085561497 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7960820053 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582887700535 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2915443469 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8947368421 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36842105263 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173466572387 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536586289332 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044717787889 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105617059288 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026361084375 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.