Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is undeniable that, a culture is a backbone of each nation, which would demonstrate the real image of a particular country. However, a group of bourgeois perceives that inhabitants who migrate abroad should adapt their tradition instead of living with existing lifestyle. I firmly agree with this statement. My arguments are justified in the ensuing paragraphs.

There are enormous benefits of adopting a foreign culture. The foremost one, these days diversity is the strength around the world. To illustrate this, according to the survey conducted by Times, Canada has got the second rank in the standard of living nations over the globe due to multicultural inhabitant are living in their territories. Besides this, the prime benefit for dwellers is to learning new traditions and escalating the relationship among the provincial bourgeois.

Moreover, people have an immense choice of outfits when they alter their own traditions. For instance, many foreign outfits’ brands are popular worldwide such as Rayban, Prada, Hollister and so on. In addition to people would improve their standard of living as they adapting multicultural.

On the contrary, a group of antithesis admits that adapting new culture has detrimental influences on their local tradition. The most valid reason is that their own cultures and values would not sustain while they are mixed with a multicultural environment. To represent this, Muslim religion women must follow the religious custom even if they went outside the kingdom. In order to maintain value and importance of their own culture, they must live in a small isolated group rather than mixed with local customs.

To sum up, it can be said that multicultural is a good phenomenon in modern society. However, each individual must maintain their own culture and values as each tradition has its own impact on our living environment. (Words: 298)

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33666666667 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88215004621 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9119191604 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1764705882 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17242320435 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484515494029 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402238878223 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893502130088 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384304463256 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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