200 deaths in flights have occurred each year compared to 40,000 deaths in automobile accidents
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to determine whether the argument is reasonable. Be sure to explain what effects the answers to these questions would have on the validity of the argument.
The author asserts that flying is a much more safer mode of communication than driving. The author uses two evidences to supports his proposition. But the evidences are not fully representative and falls short of forming a strong base for backing such argument. Firstly, the evidences fail to deduce how many people still have access to air way of commuting. And most primarily does these two modes of communication even comparable in its normal course of daily life. There are many questions which are left unstated by the author which if proved might serve to prove the argument.
First, the US statistics are stated in this argument claiming that only 200 deaths in flights have occurred each year compare to 40,000 deaths in automobile accidents.But is this statistics even stands reasonable? No matter how technologically advanced people are but still in their daily commute to work, school, markets can even people think of taking a flight instead of a car. Is it really feasible to board a flight for shopping, job or on the way to school? Almost half of the world population still have to depend on road transport for their daily activities, which practically possible in all terms may be fare, time, convenience. So the number quoted by the author as 200 compare to 40,000 is visually quite less but the very basis on which such proportion are calculated completely seems different. The statistical data if represents clearly the basis for such numbers, the authors argument can gain its strength.
Second, the pilots are considered efficient enough that they are four times less likely to have accidents on road. But is such analyses justified or even dependable. Such evidence does not clearly states that whether such pilots run how many flights each day? For how many hours they have to run a flight? To bolster the strength of the argument, these questions need to be answered.
The author’s terminology is also not persuasive. The author states pilots are four times less likely than average to have accidents on the road. How can there be a sudden comparison of pilot’s incidence on flights and on roads.
The argument is not fully representative, persuasive and cogent as the statistical data presented by the author does not have a clear basis and lacks a lot of logic and reasoning.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1876 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.823 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.62 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'safer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: safer
...he author asserts that flying is a much more safer mode of communication than driving. The...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 538, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...h are left unstated by the author which if proved might serve to prove the argumen...
^^
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...o 40,000 deaths in automobile accidents.But is this statistics even stands reasonab...
^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...0 deaths in automobile accidents.But is this statistics even stands reasonable? No m...
^^^^
Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'compare' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'compares'.
Suggestion: compares
... the number quoted by the author as 200 compare to 40,000 is visually quite less but th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 885, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...clearly the basis for such numbers, the authors argument can gain its strength. Seco...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...endable. Such evidence does not clearly states that whether such pilots run how many f...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9793814433 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74719056678 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518041237113 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7846680414 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4761904762 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90476190476 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136088942628 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448606155638 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658149833601 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796434882538 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264825757795 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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