Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Schools stands as the basis for all societies at any given period of time. It shapes our surroundings by not only imparting knowledge to our children but also developing the personal traits in them. School is the place where people start their very foundation of life, its inbuilds the core values in people. So even in times of need, when certain exterior demands are held like repair of the school building time to time which also marks the safety of the children and should always be maintained, it should not be compromised at the cost of any deduction on extracurricular activities as those activities enrich the upbringing of all children in their course of basic learning.
Funding remains a constant variant to run any institution. Any initiative to be taken by institutions depends considerably on funding. Schools faces the same issue of funding for any course of plan for its improvement, but it works differently for different institutions. In countries like India schools charges a significant amount of fees from every ward but fails to account for the expenses when asked to do so. They charges under different categories like books costs, laboratory fees, diary fees, school bus fees, etc. and other than that this they include the word ”MISCELLANEOUS FEES” to charge for those categories when they can’t give a proper term. But the children hardly gets all of these facilities and even if they get so, the charges are exorbitant and does not account for the real costs. And this is the time when school takes excuses in the form of building repairs and all for which they charge such fees. The maintenance fees are nowhere mentioned but still the school charges for the same.So there are various schools which to meet up their own needs like maintenance and repair usually comproises the needs of children.
Extracurricular activities does not always involve costs .It can be a basket ball, swimming, music, dance, paint, all of this either require a simple field, private pool, auditorium respectively so the school if cuts back the extracurricular from students in the plea of repair it is never justified. Extracurricular activities can never be an option for the children,it serves as a mandate now.
In todays sophisticated intricated world of globalization children should not only be a learned personnel, they must also struggle for existence and to be that they really need to excel in other fields of art, culture and sports. And to be so schools can never stand any recommendations to severe the extracurricular activities. Safety of the children always holds a primary concern repair, maintenance and structure of a school building should always be a point of concern but the school must chalk out such predetermined plans out of the funds they collect not out of the basic necessities of children life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...he basis for all societies at any given period of time. It shapes our surroundings by not only...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'charge'
Suggestion: charge
... the expenses when asked to do so. They charges under different categories like books c...
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
...er than that this they include the word ”MISCELLANEOUS FEES” to charge for those ...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: NO_SPACE_CLOSING_QUOTE[1]
Message: There should be a space after a closing quote.
Suggestion: ” MISCELLANEOUS
...er than that this they include the word ”MISCELLANEOUS FEES” to charge for those categories wh...
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...hey include the word ”MISCELLANEOUS FEES” to charge for those categories when the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y get so, the charges are exorbitant and does not account for the real costs. And...
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Suggestion: So
...t still the school charges for the same.So there are various schools which to meet...
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Suggestion: .
...activities does not always involve costs .It can be a basket ball, swimming, music...
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Suggestion: It
...tivities does not always involve costs .It can be a basket ball, swimming, music, ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r it is never justified. Extracurricular activities can never be an option for th...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... can never be an option for the children,it serves as a mandate now. In todays s...
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...f the funds they collect not out of the basic necessities of children life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03601694915 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89980308076 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502118644068 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.5577638783 60.3974514979 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.055555556 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.77777777778 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262500125326 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883680950732 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666531673734 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162625045619 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264900393741 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.