Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
A school is made up of many components such as the teachers, administrative staff, students and most importantly the structure itself which is the school building. School buildings are so important that most parents get fascinated by the buildings before determining the academic standard of the school. In a situation where school buildings are in need of repair, the administration of the school will have to find funds to carry out the repair, but should schools cut funding for extracurricular activities to fix the damaged school buildings? I do not think so as extracurricular activities are also very important in students development.
Extracurricular activities such as sports and arts are crucial to the development of children as a children spend most of their formative years in school. Extracurricular activities have been know to develop other skills such as football, music, instruments, public speaking and many more in children. So many people have gotten to the acme of their careers with the skills they acquired in schools through this extracurricular activity. This is an important activity in the school that shouldn’t be jeopardized in any way.
Also, there are many other ways in which the school can raise funds for the building repairs. Funds can be raised through contributions from associations such as the PTA (Parent Teachers Association) for example. PTA is an association that includes the parents and teachers for the purpose of discussing issues concerning the schools and raising funds when necessary. It is most certain that parents would prefer to raise these money than divert funds from a very important aspect of their children’s schooling. The school can even explore options such as loans that they can pay back gradually from the children’s school fees.
Some may argue that why should the school have to go through all of that to raise funds when funds from extracurricular activities can easily be diverted temporarily to give the children a befitting structure conducive for learning. Their argument maybe justified but that would be only if the school has explored other options that has been futile.
More so, we do not even know if the funds for extracurricular activities would be enough to fund the building repair. We do not know the extent of the damage or even the amount used for extracurricular activities. Why then should activities that relieve children of their stress and even develop crucial skills that become very useful to many of them be jeopardized because of damaged school structure. Schools collected tuition fee which should be enough for the running of the school including repair of damaged structures, and should in case the tuition fee is not enough they should resort to other means of raising funds and not cut funding for any important activity of the school such as extracurricular activity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...ucial to the development of children as a children spend most of their formative years in ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...l. Extracurricular activities have been know to develop other skills such as footbal...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
...tain that parents would prefer to raise these money than divert funds from a very important...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dually from the children’s school fees. Some may argue that why should the schoo...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...e children’s school fees. Some may argue that why should the school have to go t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...extracurricular activities can easily be diverted temporarily to give the childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2422.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1974248927 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98790441695 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424892703863 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4638510964 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.473684211 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5263157895 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63157894737 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363300739529 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131205140228 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825646400345 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223077994885 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687425521162 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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