According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than any other year.
Although it is possible that Super Screen ought to raise its advertising's share of budget, this author's argument does not make a cogent case for this purpose.
Frist, citing a report from the marketing department, the author posits that the number of viewers of the company's products diminished last year. What was the approach used by this department to produce this report? The marketing department may have constructed its research on sampling methods which are statistical investigation methods that identify some limited numbers of statistical community, all of the cinemas in this case, and then extrapolate the state of whole community on the results driven from that restricted number of samples. In that manner, may has the overall number of watchers been increased during last year. but it is not projected in the survey which has done.
The author later contradicts the outcomes of the aforementioned study with the opinions of the film critics. Here again, there is a deep rift in the argumentation. How many of film reviewers were asked about this company's film? Who were they? The film critics who reacted positively to the movies may have been of low credibility. They might be tyro critics of invalidated internet film reviewing websites which are still trying to learn how to write film reviews. Therefore, there is no distinction between the validity of the reviewers whose comments was referred by the author.
At last but not the least, the argument derives from the above comparison that the viewers cannot have been aware of the Super Screen films, but may be the quality of this companies' films was very poor, or may be they are focused on subjects that are not favorable for today's audience. May be the company should plan to improve its movies' quality by changing its directors, actors, or other participants. Overall, the lack of booming market cannot be the exclusive reason for a paucity of advertisement.
In conclusion, even though the role advertisement in improving the situation of any company, be it about movies or not, in the market, the case presented by this argument does not provide a strong support for this issue that could persuade the managers.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1792 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.614 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... make a cogent case for this purpose. Frist, citing a report from the marketin...
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Line 2, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ds that identify some limited numbers of statistical community, all of the cinema...
^^
Line 2, column 406, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ited numbers of statistical community, all of the cinemas in this case, and then extrapol...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 639, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...tchers been increased during last year. but it is not projected in the survey which...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rojected in the survey which has done. The author later contradicts the outcome...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e comments was referred by the author. At last but not the least, the argument ...
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Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...Screen films, but may be the quality of this companies films was very poor, or may b...
^^^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... this companies films was very poor, or may be they are focused on subjects that are n...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 293, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... not favorable for todays audience. May be the company should plan to improve its ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04132231405 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72972869911 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.5323528894 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.647058824 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23529411765 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134142794302 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407838812169 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050099030578 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692544588483 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476207136258 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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