Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

People have different views about when a young person should become independent from his parents. While some argue that it would be better for young people to remain with their parents as long as they can, I believe that young people should become self-reliant as soon as possible because he can make more money, he can save a lot of time, and he can find better jobs in the future.
One of the primary causes is that when some one becomes independent earlier, he/she will be able to make money sooner. Undoubtedly, making money is not only the most challenging, but also the most enjoyable effort of the human kind across his life. The main reason is that when an individual gets economically independent, he gradually learns to manage his money. A typical young man has not the tendency to be thrifty, even may love to squander money partying with his friends, but when you become independent you will learn to manage the pecuniary affairs. In addition, making money is enjoyable. For example, when I got salary for the first time working as a student, I became so ebullient, I went to a high-quality restaurant, and ate my favorite meal. That was a sweet memory.
Another aspect to consider is that by quick independence, one saves a lot of time. First of all, every person requires some amount of time building his own self-confidence in life. When you initiate your life there are a lot of problems that can disappoint a tyro, but as time goes by, you learn to overcome the difficulties, and acquire self-confidence. Since the process of building self confidence is time consuming, those who begin to be independent sooner, will proceed other peers. Another point is that should you become independent earlier, you will be more successful in your marriage. For instance, one of my friends went directly from a situation of relying on his parents to the marriage. The duties which a spouse carries with regard to conjugal issues are so burdensome, and my friend had a lot of problems concentrating on his relationship with his wife because he always thought about managing life and did not allocate sufficient time to his wife, thus his wife became cold with him, and they divorced after a year. If he became independent sooner, he might be able to allot more time to his private life, thereby preventing these consequences.
What is more, if some one gets rid of his family's support, this is inevitable that he enters job market sooner. This has a lot of advantages for him. The first benefit is to develop a work ethic. Work ethic will be so crucial, should some one want to achieve spectacular success in his work. When you enter the market earlier, you develop a stronger work ethic, and in comparison with those who select to enter the market later, you will win the better job opportunities, thereby enjoying a delighted career prospect. In addition, when you work in the early younghood, you will become familiar with various challenges of real work, then you would become more successful in understanding and analysing the subjects in the university, thereby obtaining an academic success as well.
In conclusion, although some assert that young people should stay in their parental families for longer periods of time, I, personally, prefer to become self-reliant sooner since I will be able to make money, waste less time, and enjoy a more prosperous career path in the future.

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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2814.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 582.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83505154639 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.730575197 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479381443299 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 895.5 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.6663265299 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223807816971 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613040866339 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051556475561 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144338883772 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522100166115 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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