Students in a university club want to help others, but they can choose only one project a year: A: help those students in nearby primary school with reading and mathematics, B: Help people who cannot afford to build or rent a home to build a house, C: Visit and assist elderly people with daily tasks.
People have different views about the pros and cons of university students participation in learning primary school students. While some argue that it would be better for university students to spend their time and energy helping poor people to build their houses, or to visit the obsolete people who require serious health help, I believe the university students should focus on teaching primary school children because it is related to knowledge more, and it saves them time.
One of the primary causes is that the most valuable asset of a person is his knowledge. By augmenting in some one's knowledge, the students provide primary students with the greatest help they ever can. For example, when I know a once very wealthy man who was illiterate. After a while, he lost all of his asset in what he, himself, called a price fluctuation in the market due to some governmental decisions. The point that is worth considering is that he could not revive his business, thereby made to labor for other people inevitably. This was a serious mental harm for him. I saw him every day in the street lamented. If this former businessman were literate, he would overcome the situation and might rebuild his business as some of his peers did. Thus, the students should help learning others because the knowledge might be more beneficial even for the wealthiest person.
Another aspect to consider is that time is gold. Students should utilize their time as efficient as it is possible. The university period is a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for students to improve their dexterity, learn a variety of subjects, and determine their future path of career, but unfortunately, this period is not such long. It is usually six or seven years at most, thus students should harness it in the most optimized way. One of the best methods of time saving for a student is to learn elementary students. In this approach, they review subjects such as reading and mathematics which serve as the foundation for their own knowledge. In fact, human's memory is so weaker than what people usually imagine. A lot of us miss the greatest opportunities in our career since we assume that we are so strong the basic materials like mathematics and reading. In that teaching in primary schools aids the university students save time by reviewing their basic knowledge, they would appear stronger in their performance at high level courses once confronted.
In conclusion, although some may argue that it is better for students to aid other people who have trouble paying for a house in constructing, or assist the elderly, I, personally, believe that the university students should allocate their energy and time to educating elementary school students in reading and mathematics because not only does this enhances the primary school children's scientific level, but also it helps the university students in saving time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03340292276 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7482358098 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515657620042 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 100.225618497 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 114.80952381 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262829013668 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747488738057 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088465045611 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191061061769 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672991842645 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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