The above stated argument is faulty mainly because it filled with assumptions like, the percentage of fan is increasing and still many don't watch them. Ultimately, concluding that the reason for failure in of super screen production is due to the lack of promotion in public.
Primarily, the fact that the percentage of viewers increase every year can be explained by two reasons. One reason could be prompt fans love to watch super screen's movies. As there is decline in the viewers the number of people who rate positively remained same. For instance, in the early years 20 of 100 people could have rated good and the next year the 20 of 50 could have given a good feedback. Likewise, the percentage could have increased with fewer people so it a flawed fact.
Secondly, the statement overestimates the report from marketing department that during the last couple of years fewer people watch their movies. The survey cannot be blindly accepted, there could be various reason a survey can be wrong. Maybe the country can be undergoing recession which could be a reason the for low turnout or the survey did failed to take account of customers in different city which has more viewers. Hence, this statement cannot be considered.
Lastly, the argument assumes that the reason for the lack of audience is because of very low promotion and crowd aren't aware of their movies. Since the movies were running good couple of years back this statement has a huge drawback. Bad movies could have wooed away the fans and viewers. Need less to say, the argument cannot assume a reason so easily.
There is clearly a scope to improve the standing in the given argument. To improve the argument, baseless assumptions and wrong facts cannot be implied.
Essay evaluation report
samples:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/following-taken-me…
----------------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1411 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.719 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.388 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.021 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...age of fan is increasing and still many dont watch them. Ultimately, concluding that...
^^^^
Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ans love to watch super screens movies. As there is decline in the viewers the num...
^^
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'fail'
Suggestion: fail
...n the for low turnout or the survey did failed to take account of customers in differe...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...hat the reason for the lack of audience is because of very low promotion and crowd arent a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 114, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...because of very low promotion and crowd arent aware of their movies. Since the movies...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and crowd arent aware of their movies. Since the movies were running good couple of ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, lastly, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87542087542 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46153047677 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1690829433 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1764705882 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4705882353 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143241677579 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488236053539 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486151458509 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0711405129887 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045843178224 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.