The recommendation stated that super screen movie production company should invest budget on advertising to reach the public and that would increase the number of people watching super screen produced movies, which is not cogent and realiable.
First, the assumption made by advertising director on the basis of marketing department report is not convincing. He did not mention about the data of attended people from past year to other year. He even did not mention the decrease percentage of people. Moreover, without doing field visit and knowing the public interest no one can say people are not coming to attend movie only because of lack in promotion. The marketing department might have to research about may be the movie lover population are migrated to other places or may be the people does not want to go watch movie on their super screen produced movie. May be the facilities provided there are not good in people prespectives. Other reason may be the town has other better movie production house than screen movies. All questions need to be answer first before reaching the conclusion about decreasing the number of people in camparison to past few years.
Second, the advertising director mention about the good reviews about the super screen produced movie. But, the report doesnot mention about the people's habit to reading and listening news. May be the majority of the population are uneducated or does not love to update day to day activites. Without, doing research in this factor, it is not necessasry only good review helps to increase the population in movie hall.
Third, director even did not think about their providing facilities and people satisfaction. There is no proper evidence about the super screen movie has better quality and facilities to the people. They might be done survey about whether people are enjoing their services or not, may be the hospitality of the workers are not good or the ticket are so expensive to afford the people. I dont think only investing the money in advertisement will increase the numbe r of people in super screen produced movie. Without any relevent research and concrete results it will be worhtless to spend huge money on advertisement with the hope of public will come to visit super screen movie. Lots of field survey, focus group discussion and real data is required to make a conclusion.
Hence, spending money in advertisement is not a proper solution.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The recommendation stated that super screen movie production company should invest budget on advertising to reach the public and that would increase the number of people watching super screen produced movies, which is not cogent and realiable.
Error: realiable Suggestion: reliable
Sentence: May be the facilities provided there are not good in people prespectives.
Error: prespectives Suggestion: prospectives
Sentence: All questions need to be answer first before reaching the conclusion about decreasing the number of people in camparison to past few years.
Error: camparison Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: But, the report doesnot mention about the people's habit to reading and listening news.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: doesnot Suggestion: despot
Sentence: May be the majority of the population are uneducated or does not love to update day to day activites.
Error: activites Suggestion: activities
Error: uneducated Suggestion: educated
Sentence: Without, doing research in this factor, it is not necessasry only good review helps to increase the population in movie hall.
Error: necessasry Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: They might be done survey about whether people are enjoing their services or not, may be the hospitality of the workers are not good or the ticket are so expensive to afford the people.
Error: enjoing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: I dont think only investing the money in advertisement will increase the numbe r of people in super screen produced movie.
Error: numbe Suggestion: number
Error: dont Suggestion: don
Sentence: Without any relevent research and concrete results it will be worhtless to spend huge money on advertisement with the hope of public will come to visit super screen movie.
Error: worhtless Suggestion: worthless
Error: relevent Suggestion: relevant
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1989 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.923 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.548 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.244 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... their super screen produced movie. May be the facilities provided there are not g...
^^
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...t, the report doesnot mention about the peoples habit to reading and listening news. Ma...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...abit to reading and listening news. May be the majority of the population are uned...
^^
Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...re so expensive to afford the people. I dont think only investing the money in adver...
^^^^
Line 7, column 681, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'Lots of fields'.
Suggestion: Lots of fields
... will come to visit super screen movie. Lots of field survey, focus group discussion and real...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g money in advertisement is not a proper solution.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, may, moreover, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03217821782 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60473556019 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467821782178 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1493509821 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.65 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351344847574 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106041529831 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882496333558 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183688003341 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103371093639 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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