According to recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in the older year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by more reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly the contentsof these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, problem lies not with the quality of movie but the public lack of awarness that movies of good quality are available. Super screen therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year reaching the public through advertising.
Given recommendation and the argument is upon the increasing number of positive reviews from past years and asserting problem, that it lies on lack of awareness among people about the quality of Super Screen-produced movies. But maybe the above statement lacks details which weaken the given recommendation about increasing viewers of Super Screen produced movies.
The movie's success depends upon the story-line, logic, direction, and many other things. If the movie is too long then it sounds tedious, boring and if it is too small then people state that climax(the conclusive part or final part) is not properly directed. The statement about increasing positive reviewers may be due to the logic, story-line of the movie have been developed from past years and reviewers like a type of logical movie which enforces them to give positive feedback.
The relase of the movie is similarly important for success of movie. If the movie is on holidays it leads more chances of success. Hence, even though the positive reviews may not lead more viewers.
Also, the lack of awarness that movies of good quality are available among people may sound true as the people judje movies based on reviews and the advertising of the movie. This leads to lack of advertising of Super Screeen which result into less viewers. Hence, next year if Super Screen reach to public it leads to more viewers.
Even the cost of movie tickets is similar important for getting viewers. So as the quality of movie increases the price of movie also get increases thus, lead to indigent people to restrict themselves to watch such movie. Also, the illegal copies sales have been increasing in the market lead to less viewers.
Thus, the given information regarding less number of prospective viewers lacks much information which may be completed by above statements regarding- increasing logic, story-line, adjusting releasing dates, cost of production and awareness among people.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1595 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.619 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.676 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'movies'' or 'movie's'?
Suggestion: movies'; movie's
...of Super Screen produced movies. The movies success depends upon the story-line, lo...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...milarly important for success of movie. If the movie is on holidays it leads more ...
^^
Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun viewers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...sing of Super Screeen which result into less viewers. Hence, next year if Super Scre...
^^^^
Line 9, column 297, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun viewers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e been increasing in the market lead to less viewers. Thus, the given information...
^^^^
Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...production and awareness among people.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, regarding, similarly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20189274448 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62897749215 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482649842271 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0800194202 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.933333333 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295464379463 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109027224484 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810144712491 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154963425862 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08895948176 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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