Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The recommendation given is about prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza to burgeon the public to increase the business which has been steadily decreasing due to the popularity of skateboarding. But I m not convinced about the recommendation present.
Maybe central plaza is present for the number of years and present in some backward area where people restrict less to go. But before two years, the central plaza would be the only plaza so many people willingly go there for shopping and hence the business rises. Nowadays there are many plazas which have started in some Porsche area or area where people love to go. Thus it leads shoppers to change their shops to the new plaza which leads more money to shoppers. Hence, a decline in the number of shoppers in the central plaza.
As the number of skateboarders has increased it also lead central plaza to grow its business by taking advantage of skateboarders by organizing the competition and hence it may lead many people to visit the central plaza to view and hence shoppers would seek to back again.
Thinking about the litter and vandalism increment maybe it's because of irregular maintenance of the plaza which also leads people to visit and shoppers to come back, hence it may be another reason of downfall in business in central plaza.
Even skateboarding may be the reason for decline of business due to risk of child to get collide with skateboarders. Rather to stop skateboarding, central plaza should give a special space for skateboarders hence it will lead to fun activity to people too and hence increases business.
Thus prohibiting of skateboarding is not the best recommendation for increasing business in central plaza.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1394 1500
No. of Different Words: 126 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.926 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.844 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.602 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.426 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.722 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e area or area where people love to go. Thus it leads shoppers to change their shops...
^^^^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'leads'?
Suggestion: leads
... of skateboarders has increased it also lead central plaza to grow its business by t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...he litter and vandalism increment maybe its because of irregular maintenance of the...
^^^
Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...hild to get collide with skateboarders. Rather to stop skateboarding, central plaza sh...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople too and hence increases business. Thus prohibiting of skateboarding is not...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, may, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04946996466 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88769339005 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469964664311 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.366140167 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.083333333 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58333333333 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388947468418 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17041404966 0.0743258471296 229% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105259395697 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226937053423 0.128457276422 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592814072985 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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