The author asserted that all students need to take a mandatory program sponsored by the high school for solving traffic accident problems. For supporting the argument, however, the author relies on several unconvincing assumptions thus further evidence pertaining to traffic accidents and opinions of parents is necessary.
Firstly, the author presumes the majority of accidents are caused by teenage drivers, but it may not be the case. Because, the author passes judgment base on the fact that “several” accidents happened and it may not be the same word that a lot of teenagers made an accident. other residents besides teenagers might have brought the reported accidents and teenagers might have been victims of those. In addition, even if the teenager bring about accidents, they might have driven a bicycle. To be a convincing argument, the author needs to present evidence related to accidents caused by teenage drivers of Centerville.
Secondly, the author assumed that a number of parents are concerned about accidents of their children and mandatory program will be welcomed by those parents, however, this might not be true. The author does not demonstrate the socio-economical background of parents thus it is uncertain that all parents who lived in Centerville can afford to take safety programs held by the high school. A survey that can provide an opinion of parents and is representative of general parents of Centerville is essential to evaluate the author’s recommendation.
Lastly, although the author thinks the high school as an institution that could deliver the best safety education programs for students, but it is uncertain. There are already two existing driving schools that may be more effective for secure driving of students. Moreover, the capability of high school to provide competent teachers is insecure, based on information given by the author. If they do not have competitive teachers and the capability to conduct a safe driving program, an attempt to develop that kind of program may be a waste of resources. Accordingly, the author has to take into consideration that it could be the best choice for the high school, parents, and students.
To sum up, the author presents the solution of the high school program for parents and students to reduce accidents caused by teenage drivers but it sounds like not the best recommendation because the argument is based on numerous unjustified assumptions. To be more convincing advice, further evidence pertaining to the opinion of parents, the cause of accidents, and the capability of high school is crucial.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2132 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.137 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.814 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...at a lot of teenagers made an accident. other residents besides teenagers might have ...
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Line 5, column 687, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r the high school, parents, and students To sum up, the author presents the solut...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in addition, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27469879518 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93788603181 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460240963855 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9912103522 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.8125 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9375 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276665533221 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964640944445 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402787220163 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155942153794 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030566280146 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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