"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
In the letter, the author mentions the need of an efficient driver’s education guidance needed for teenagers concluding that effective and compulsory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution for teaching driver’s education to them. However, while the conclusion thus drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several unfolded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, the following three questions must be addressed.
First of all, the author does not mention about the likability of Centerville High School to undertake driver’s education. The school might be out of enough space or resources to set up for a driver’s education. Perhaps the school in such a scenario might not align with the solution of the author the likeness of setting up a program for driver’s school for teenagers is certainly not about to happen in anytime sooner. If such a situation prevails, then the assertion made by the author is seriously hampered.
Secondly, if driver’s education is a mandatory course of the school then the parents are compelled to take any step to find the solution for their financial and time management problems. For example, the two driving schools are the only options, if an overwhelming teenagers flow into a driving school, the other is compelled to lower its price for the sake of running the business and attracting new clients. Economical and time consuming driving lesson which the parents are expecting can be achieved when the real factors of economics is played in an effective way. If such a scenario is achieved, then the claim made by the author is significantly impaired.
Lastly, since past two years record significantly shows the accident involving teenage drivers, the Centerville traffic might have issued some strict laws and restriction for any teenage drivers. As parents cannot afford of losing their child to immature driving on the main highway, they are compelled to give away the budget needed for their child to learn driving. Here, more data is needed before a firm conclusion is reached. Of all these answers could be answered, it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
In conclusion, as it stands now the claim is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1920 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...the real factors of economics is played in an effective way. If such a scenario is achieved, then t...
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Line 4, column 359, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
... budget needed for their child to learn driving. Here, more data is needed before a fir...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18897637795 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87988351013 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53280839895 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1771704291 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5625 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26224050447 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749406157298 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756021794031 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124281021845 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571551023852 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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