The author claims that the pemchint was used by Dodecan hunters to expel dangerous wildlife by based on recent discoveries. This sounds interesting, however, the author relies on numerous unjustified assumtpions which cannot be taken for granted thus the author needs to answer to other possibilities which are deduced those statement.
Firstly, the author depends on the unconvinsing assumptions that the location where a pemchint was found is the same the location where it have been used. If a pemchint was found along with Dodecan hunters' tools it may not be certain evidence that shows a pemchint is used by hunters. Because there is large time gap from their usage and discovery, there are still possibilities that a pemchint is used for Dodecan rituals and celebrations and just moved to the place of hunters'. Accordingly, the author has to provide more specific information about the usage of this tool.
Secondly, the author assumes that a pemchint found recently along with Dodecan hunters' tool has been used by same people who have used a pemchint for their rituals and celebrations, however, even if it is discovered at the same place, it may not be used by other people for another purpose. Other people who have lived in that place also could have made a tool like a pemchint as a pemchint is not consist of unique ingredients, but made by hollowed pieces of bone, shell, or wood with long straps which seems to be easy to get in anywhere. Thus, the observation of discovery cannot tell everything about the users of a pemchint. To be the more reliable argument, the author needs to answer the possibilities that there are other kind of tributes who could make the tool.
Lastly, even if it is used by Dodecan hunters, there are possibilities that it could have been used for just musical instruments besides repelling dangerous wildlife. The author assumes that it might not been used for musical performance based on the report that there have been no other musical artifacts nearby the place where a pemchint was excavated. However, other musical artifacts for Dodecan rituals and celebrations might not be discovered yet or might have decayed by nature. Thus the author hardly conclusively asserts that a pemchint have been used for other purpose just by relying on discoveries until now.
In sum, the author states that a pemchint have been used for other purpose rather than used for a musical instrument, however, the author relies on inconclusive assumptions thus it cannot effectively remove alternative explanations. Thus, to be justifiable argument evidence pertaining to the accurate date and real users of a tool is necessary to evaluate this claim.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 445 350
No. of Characters: 2191 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.593 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.924 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.665 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.425 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this statement' or 'those statements'?
Suggestion: this statement; those statements
...o other possibilities which are deduced those statement. Firstly, the author depends on the ...
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Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...found is the same the location where it have been used. If a pemchint was found alon...
^^^^
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e the location where it have been used. If a pemchint was found along with Dodecan...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...ol like a pemchint as a pemchint is not consist of unique ingredients, but made by holl...
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Line 5, column 731, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
... the possibilities that there are other kind of tributes who could make the tool. ...
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Line 7, column 487, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ed yet or might have decayed by nature. Thus the author hardly conclusively asserts ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04269662921 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74741135579 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408988764045 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0039416201 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.25 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8125 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268290069086 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103432264621 0.0743258471296 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833933356866 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158324230455 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721297120489 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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