The given passage asserts that the Arctic deer, a natural habitat of Canadas' arctic region depends on food in warmer region and migrates to the nearby island during the colder part of the year. Recently, there has been a decent decrease in the deer's population which is alleged to be the effect of green house on the topography of the island. The author failed to produce substantial evidences for the declination of deer's population which can further be investigated to derive upon certain facts and data required to conclude.
Firstly, the author failed to delineate the initial population of the Arctic deer in the island where it is supposed to be surveyed. How can a plummet in the population be calculated without a proper input? The variation in data can easily mislead the surveys' conclusion. Moreover, the author did not mention about which part of the year the survey was conducted. In case, it happened to be on colder part of the year, obviously the deers could have already migrated to the nearby islands. If these facts are proved to true, then the author's claim on the deer's population does not hold water.
Further, the author mentioned about the data been given by the local hunters. Hunters are those who depend upon killing animals for their livelihood. Ironically, a hunter exhibiting the data about the population of an animal habitat to the particular area is aberrant. How about the local hunters practiced poaching and killing animals for their benefit ? Apparently, this must be the conclusion if the hunters are scrutinized for further information regarding their routine activities. Thus the authors' vague information and blaming the green house effect for the steep fall in the deer's population cannot be substantiated.
Despite the fact that the poachers and miscalculation, I agree to the effect of green house gases on the environment. However, a solid proof is required for testing the intensity of the gases in the island. Anyways, an island is always abandoned or desolated unless it is a place for tourist attraction. Possibly, there must not be a disturbance in the ecological balance in a sequestrated island. Therefore, the authors' argument about the greenhouse effect seems to unnerve the claim.
To conclude, solid data and proofs are required to obviate mother nature being the reason for the decrease in the deer's population. From the factors provided in the above passage, it is conspicuous that humans must be the reason behind the deer's population being at the brink of extinction.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2072 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.957 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.636 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.098 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.318 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.301 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...there has been a decent decrease in the deers population which is alleged to be the e...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 252, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'surveys'' or 'survey's'?
Suggestion: surveys'; survey's
...ariation in data can easily mislead the surveys conclusion. Moreover, the author did no...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 555, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
... to true, then the authors claim on the deers population does not hold water. Furthe...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ion regarding their routine activities. Thus the authors vague information and blami...
^^^^
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
... house effect for the steep fall in the deers population cannot be substantiated. De...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n a sequestrated island. Therefore, the authors argument about the greenhouse effect se...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...eing the reason for the decrease in the deers population. From the factors provided i...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...at humans must be the reason behind the deers population being at the brink of extinc...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation being at the brink of extinction.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, apparently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7448396724 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483253588517 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9029646613 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19422192725 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600776733637 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646068235602 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119400470444 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695759268019 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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