In a letter to the editor, a central plaza store owner complaints about the aftermath of the plaza after the skateboarders stalk around. The store owner clearly states that the nuisances caused by the skateboarders have drastic effects on the public visiting the plaza for shopping and other recreations, which has affected the business centres in the central plaza extensively.He requests the municipality to restrict skateboarding in and around the central plaza, so that the place is well maintained to attract the crowd. Subsequently, a considerable increase in the business can be achieved. The shopkeeper's predictions are quite irrelevant to blatantly blame the skateboard community for the decrease in their business in central plaza. I can allude with few other factors affecting the business in central plaza in the forthcoming passages.
Firstly, the store keeper failed to provide solid evidences for people not shopping around the central plaza. The central plaza must be one of the oldest building in the city, which failed to compete with the newly constructed shopping malls with upgraded facilities for the crowd. Shopaholic people are allured by the infrastructure of the shopping centres provided a good loiter room, a comfortable diaper changing areas, and mother's feeding room. Central plaza must lack in the facilities which the other shopping malls gives to the people. The plaza must be outmoded and outdated in terms of the comfort zones and cushions offered to the people.
Second point is, the shop owner must provide concrete proof for the litters being created by the skateboarders. The untidy environment could have been the outcome of the mismanagement by the central plaza's management and housekeeping community. Proper care must be rendered to the janitors working to keep the plaza clean and tidy. Therefore, a problem between the owners and the workers might have forced the central plaza being deserted by the janitors. Such that, the litters are not cleaned up. The shop owner failed to inquire about the house keeping community which can be commensurate with the amount of garbage around the central plaza.
Furthermore to add, the shops in the central plaza must be inspected by the health department to derive a report about the quality of the food services rendered to the people. Earlier , complaints were made about the unhygienic and substandard of the fast foods offered to the people. Precisely, the municipality and the health inspectors must be contacted for deriving these proofs from the Health safety standards point of view. The shop owner must provide a plausible evidence beforehand accusing the skateboarders for their business to go detrimental.
To conclude, I hope the statements mentioned and discussed could be taken in to account by the shop owner to make his predictions reasonable.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2351 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.167 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.255 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.238 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.348 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 379, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...entres in the central plaza extensively.He requests the municipality to restrict s...
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Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'plazas'' or 'plaza's'?
Suggestion: plazas'; plaza's
...ome of the mismanagement by the central plazas management and housekeeping community. ...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...t of garbage around the central plaza. Furthermore to add, the shops in the central plaza ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...services rendered to the people. Earlier , complaints were made about the unhygien...
^^
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aints were made about the unhygienic and substandard of the fast foods offered to...
^^
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ner to make his predictions reasonable.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, second, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27533039648 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8498724064 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473568281938 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0466080937 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.047619048 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.619047619 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260088691762 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930597018341 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810288934085 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144152421099 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100375526017 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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