Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug

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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In this argument the author urge to consider that there is a declining of arctic deer population due to the increase in global warming in recent year. To support this recommendation, he states that the Arctic dear are not able to migrate from one island to the other as the path covered in ice is not available for them. I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.

First, author hypothesized that the path connecting adjacent islands is not covered in ice due increase in Global warming within that area restricting migration of Deers due to which they are dying because they dont have to access for their food. It is equally possible to assume that the reason for the decrease in deer population is their wild nature within themselves as they are known to be loners for the fact that they do not form social bond with their own species. Also statistics shows that at least 24 deer were found in dying state not for the reason for the inaccessibility for their food but for blood bath in fight with their competitors in their mating season. Arctic deer are also known be to aggressive during mating season and unfortunately, their migration and mating season collides in same time of the year. Hence it is presumption to say that Arctic deer are dying because they cannot migrate and access their food.

Second, author believes in the report of local hunters which states that the population of deer is declining and therefore, presupposed that increase in global warming is a reason for the declination of their population. This assumption is unwarranted. It might seems enough to concede with the author but a careful scrutiny reveals some logical flaws that must be considered. Arctic region is an isolated polar place where arctic deer is the primary source of meet for the hunters living in that area. It might be possible that there is a increase of hunting by the people living in that region due to which dear population is declining. Also some deer might be presumed dead due to some illness caused by eating rotten meat of other animal or fishes. Therefore, the claims made by the author seems unsubstantial.

Author uses survey error which is defined as the biased survey taken from the culprit region. Here the report made by local hunters about the declining of arctic deer population seems biased as they are trying to vindicate themselves from the act of hunting. Hence, this argument is flawed.

In conclusion, this is not a strong argument. To bolster it the author must, at very least, should provide concrete evidence like an unbiased survey from the geologist and availability of food in the adjacent island, perhaps by the way of reliable investigation, so that the proper cause for declination of deer population can be revealed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eople living in that region due to which dear population is declining. Also some ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, second, so, therefore, at least, in conclusion, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86680761099 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60554335232 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439746300211 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5103268507 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.65 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295395092028 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851239989687 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070652794575 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158115291658 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701860345013 0.0628817314937 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2252 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.761 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.523 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.547 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5