"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
In this argument the author urge to consider that with increase in population of Balmer Island, there is an increase in accident involving moped and pedestrians, therefore, the town council should put the restriction on the number of moped rented during summer season. To support this recommendation, he states that the same is been done by Seaville town council when they acknowledge the same reason for their road accidents. I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.
First, the author presupposes that the accidents between mopeds and pedestrians is because of the error made by moped drivers. It is entirely possible to assume that pedestrians can also become the cause of the accidents. There is separate lane designated for mopeds of extreme left and right of the roads in Balmer Island with the traffic light facilities. Perhaps it is also possible that pedestrians somehow neglected the traffic lights and come on the moped lanes, which could be a cause of accident. Also the island is more attracted to tourist than locals for their shopping and party culture which is why foreigners, unknown of island's traffic rules, could involve in the accidents. Therefore, it is a presumption to say that moped accidents are a cause of the error made my moped drivers only.
Second, Author speculated that the action taken by Seaville council in limiting the rented moped resulted in decrease of accidents by 50%. This assumption is unwarranted. The roads of Seaville island are narrow and not well maintained. Also resident of that island does not follow the traffic rules properly due to the leniency in their traffic law. According to the statistics there are 40 % more accidents there in comparison with Balmer island and therefore Enforcing the law for restricting the moped makes sense for public and tourist safety. On the other hand, Balmer island, due to the strict traffic laws, Accidents are lesser and contained within the area only where there is plethora of tourist. Hence, after carefully scrutinizing the situation, the argument is logically flawed.
In this argument, author used the wrong reversal flaw which is defined that what happens to A, the same cannot be happening to B. Hence the argument unsubstantially hypothesize that the decision made by Seaville must be allied to Balmer island as well but is fundamentally wrong as discussed above.
In conclusion this is not a strong argument. To bolster is future the author must provide the concrete evidence, perhaps by the way of reliable investigation, that whether there is a need to restrict the rented moped or is educating the tourist enough to reduce the further accident involving pedestrians.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2199 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.685 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.146 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...es, which could be a cause of accident. Also the island is more attracted to tourist...
^^^^
Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...and are narrow and not well maintained. Also resident of that island does not follow...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15068493151 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77180243443 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488584474886 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5725778596 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313579965288 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876877024035 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098431296104 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1685460452 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800335886295 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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