Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
In this argument the author urge to consider that salicylates can be the casue of reduced headache for the residence of Mentia. To support this recommendation, he cited the study of ten years which reveals the correlation betwen the reduced headache and use of Salicylates. While some people agree to this, I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.
First, the author states that food industry is using Salicylates at food preservatives and food additives which he affirms to be the reason why resident of mentia are having reduction of headache complains. Here, Correlations does not proves causation. It is entirely possible that the cause for headache reduction is something else, perhaps their healthy life-style as Mentia is a small town. It is also possible to assume that the denizens did not reported for repeated headaches and they might have found a home-made remedy for this malady. Therefore, reports might not be measured right. While, the brief statement of the ten year study and use of salicylates correlation seems to appear a robust idea , it deficit between what stated and what there is evidence for it is too large to be overlooked. Thhis ultimately cause a week argument that will count against author conclusion.
Second, author hypothesized that the mentia people will suffer from fewer headaches in future as states by the health expert. This assumption is unwarranted. It is equally possible to assume that the reason for their fewer headache is be related to the use of aspirin as salicylates and Aspirin both fell in same chemical family. Therefore, this assumption is overgeneralization and author's argument lack compelling and affluent reasoning to convince the proposal of fewer headache in future for the residents of Mantia.
However, Author is flawed in a way that he fails to substantiate his conclusion with strong evidence and is teemed with poor reasoning. The careful perusing of the evident provide in the argument reveals that many questions have been left unanswered without which the reader cannot consider it to be consequential.
In conclusion, this is not a strong argument. To bolster it, the author must, at very least, provide the concrete evidence regarding the cause of headache and the remedy chosen by the resident of mantia, whether is it home-made or a consultation by heath clinic, perhaps by the survey, which will strengthen the author's claim.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this argument the author urge to consider that salicylates can be the casue of reduced headache for the residence of Mentia.
Error: casue Suggestion: case
Sentence: To support this recommendation, he cited the study of ten years which reveals the correlation betwen the reduced headache and use of Salicylates.
Error: betwen Suggestion: between
Sentence: First, the author states that food industry is using Salicylates at food preservatives and food additives which he affirms to be the reason why resident of mentia are having reduction of headache complains.
Error: mentia Suggestion: mention
Sentence: It is entirely possible that the cause for headache reduction is something else, perhaps their healthy life-style as Mentia is a small town.
Error: life-style Suggestion: lifestyle
Sentence: It is also possible to assume that the denizens did not reported for repeated headaches and they might have found a home-made remedy for this malady.
Error: home-made Suggestion: homemade
Sentence: Second, author hypothesized that the mentia people will suffer from fewer headaches in future as states by the health expert.
Error: mentia Suggestion: mention
Sentence: This assumption is unwarranted.
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Therefore, this assumption is overgeneralization and author's argument lack compelling and affluent reasoning to convince the proposal of fewer headache in future for the residents of Mantia.
Error: overgeneralization Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To bolster it, the author must, at very least, provide the concrete evidence regarding the cause of headache and the remedy chosen by the resident of mantia, whether is it home-made or a consultation by heath clinic, perhaps by the survey, which will strengthen the author's claim.
Error: mantia Suggestion: mania
Error: home-made Suggestion: homemade
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1981 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.054 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.807 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.38 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'prove'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: prove
... complains. Here, Correlations does not proves causation. It is entirely possible that...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'prove'
Suggestion: prove
... complains. Here, Correlations does not proves causation. It is entirely possible that...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'report'
Suggestion: report
...ble to assume that the denizens did not reported for repeated headaches and they might h...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 706, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...orrelation seems to appear a robust idea , it deficit between what stated and what...
^^
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... the reason for their fewer headache is be related to the use of aspirin as salicy...
^^
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion and authors argument lack compelling and affluent reasoning to convince the ...
^^
Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... lack compelling and affluent reasoning to convince the proposal of fewer headac...
^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d in a way that he fails to substantiate his conclusion with strong evidence and ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1862244898 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88350519874 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2163727842 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.944444444 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15138149569 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449864404055 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658914135028 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754003855772 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585780989652 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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