The argument predict that the business of the heating oil retailing must enhance via declining temperature and the growing population. However, to make the claim more convincing, several assumption need supports and bolster.
The author states since forecasters predict the environment of below-normal temperature will incessant for several years, the need of heating-oil must growing a lot. Nevertheless, we need further evidence to proof the author’s prospective. Although the temperature was below-normal in the past ninety days, we cannot assert the condition will continue for decades. The forecaster, might be the student in the college not as professional as the expert, probably cannot make the right decision. Also, the author doesn’t show any evidences to proof the prediction. The merely clues of the future weather prediction cannot confidence the people.
Even if the climate does at the lower temperature in the future, citizens might not use heating-oil to heat their house. In this improving society, myriads of technology are made to let people’s live more convenience. Once the new product can heat the house without heating-oil operate by the electric, even it costs lower can more environmental friendly. Also, the price of the heating-oil might too high because the factory cannot afford the needs that people find the alternative product to replace the heating-oil. Furthermore, the government might enact new laws to pretend our Earth to damage by human being such as decline the foot print of the carbon, or limit the carbon dioxide pollution, or ask for new technology to decline cars pollute. The aforementioned laws might make the market of heating-oil decline.
The author still mentions that more buildings are built in the decade that the needs for heating-oil must increase because the population will enhance. However, the author still not prove any evidences to make sure the population will growing in recently. Since the temperature are lower in the future, people might decline their willing to stay at the town that the population not only have evidence increase, also the native citizen all move out to seek new town to live. Hence, the more building they have built, the more vacancy of the house will appear. Even if the needs for heating-oil increase truly, the retail business may not earn profits because the costs of the oil might increase either. Although retailers sell higher price of heating-oil, they also use more money to buy oil that the business is not a well business at all. In conclusion, the piece assumes a lot on the bias of very narrow evidence that the author needs to address the above assumptions to strengthen the issue.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2014 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.224 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.33 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'grow'
Suggestion: grow
...dences to make sure the population will growing in recently. Since the temperature are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1368159204 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77090868707 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.722784169 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.684210526 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291479778191 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905753663228 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628953527155 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193716358157 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503475614924 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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