The writer say that there has been a decrease in number volunteers in Pleasantvillle. And the demand of volunteers has increased of late.They provide a solution for this problem by stating that the Pleasantville school should include a compulsory program for every student to complete 40 hours in community service prior to graduation. Although seeming plausible at first the argument has many flaws.Which will be discussed below.
First of all the use of ambiguous words such as several, recent makes the argument weak.As the writer is not giving any solid evidence or numbers. The phrase in recent years can very well imply 5 years or can also imply 15 years so there is no method to quantize the seriousness of argument.
Secondly the argument says that the number of volunteered has decrease but does not provide any concrete evidence for this claim. It may be the case that infarct the number of community service providing organisation has increased. In this case the information about these various organization has not yet reached the student. Then students cannot be blamed in this case. Hence the author must give proper reasons for the decrease in student volunteers to improve the argument.
Finally the argument suggests that the high school should require every student to complete 40 hours community service prior to graduation. Although providing assisting to charity would provide young people a platform to give some thing back to the community. Making it compulsory requirement contradict the very meaning "volunteering".Moreover the writer arrives at the number(40 hours) randomly without sitting reason behind it.
In some the argument is unconvincing as it stands and the writer should provide additional information regarding the decrease in students. And He/she should also specify the clear meaning of words like several, recent to make a compelling argument. Lastly making volunteering a requirement for high school graduation seems like a harsh decision without first finding the reasons for the decrease in volunteers.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1693 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.162 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.722 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...and of volunteers has increased of late.They provide a solution for this problem by ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... community service prior to graduation. Although seeming plausible at first the argument...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Which
...le at first the argument has many flaws.Which will be discussed below. First of all ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le at first the argument has many flaws.Which will be discussed below. First of all ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...several, recent makes the argument weak.As the writer is not giving any solid evid...
^^
Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...students cannot be blamed in this case. Hence the author must give proper reasons for...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...nt volunteers to improve the argument. Finally the argument suggests that the high sch...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... community service prior to graduation. Although providing assisting to charity would pr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...provide young people a platform to give some thing back to the community. Making it compul...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...e very meaning 'volunteering'.Moreover the writer arrives at the number40 hour...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 346, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e very meaning 'volunteering'.Moreover the writer arrives at the number40 hour...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...andomly without sitting reason behind it In some the argument is unconvincing as ...
^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reasons for the decrease in volunteers.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37770897833 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18528159575 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510835913313 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5928857931 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220639557009 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765927522498 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485409273442 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12224619773 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054522408791 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.